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TPO-41Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO-41 Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Education is one of the main things for our life, and teachers are those people who teach us something. Even though there are many kinds of teachers depend on where or which subject they teach, all teachers are respectfull member of the society. It seems to me that teachers are always valued same way. I feel this way for two most important reasons which I will explore in the following essay. First of all, the way of thinking of people are changed and that impacts on the reverence of the teacher. Once people thought teacher' s main responsibility was to make a good student, but now this trend has changed; people consider them more than the medium of education. For instance, when I was at school, I saw most of the student were afraid teachers because they punished the student. On the other hand, I recently visited my school again for some personal purposes and met with my honorable teachers. I found very few of my teacher as most of them have already taken their retard. I amused by the behavior of one schoolboy who came to one of junior teacher and talked without any fear. But I observed that the boldness of the boy was not mean he dishonors the teacher. So, people way of revering other is continuously changing but respect is not banished. Secondly, now people are more dependent on the computer to learn new things which reduce the connection between teacher and people. If you read any story about the life of any teacher before the 1980s, you would find that people normally depended on the decision of teachers of that locality for any serious matter because there were very few educated people. But now the percentage of literacy is more than that time. As a result, now people are self-defended and freer to take their decision; moreover, they can get any information from the Internet which was not present that time. But again in most of the time, people ask to join teachers to them with due respect. Even though the way of involvement of teachers in our day to day life is changed, we general people respect our teacher in the same way. In sum up, the way of revering of our teacher is changing but not reduced. It is because people nowadays are more candid and because the percentage of literacy is improved and people have other options to get information. So, we need to keep connected with our teacher to know more and we should always respect them.
Education is one of the main things for our life, and
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teachers
are those
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people
who teach us something.
Even though
there are
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many
kinds of
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teachers
depend on where or which subject they teach, all
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teachers
are
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respectfull
member of the society. It seems to me that
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teachers
are always valued same way. I feel this way for two most
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important
reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

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First of all
, the way of thinking of
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people
are
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changed
and that impacts on the reverence of the
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teacher
. Once
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people
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thought
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make
a
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good
student,
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but
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now
this trend has
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changed
;
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people
consider them more than the medium of education.
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, when I was at school, I
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saw
most of the student were afraid
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teachers
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because
they punished the student.
On the other hand
, I recently visited my school again for
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some
personal purposes and met with my honorable
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teachers
. I found
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very
few of my
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teacher
as most of them have already taken their retard. I amused by the behavior of one schoolboy who came to one of junior
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teacher
and talked without any fear.
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But
I observed that the boldness of the boy was not mean he dishonors the
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teacher
.
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So
,
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people
way of revering other is
continuously
changing
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but
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respect
is not banished.

Secondly
,
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now
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people
are more dependent on the computer to learn new things which
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reduce
the
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connection between
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teacher
and
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people
. If you read any story about the life of any
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teacher
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before
the 1980s, you would find that
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people
normally
depended on the decision of
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teachers
of that locality for any serious matter
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because
there were
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very
few educated
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people
.
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But
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now
the percentage of literacy is more than that time.
As a result
,
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now
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people
are self-defended and freer to take their decision;
moreover
, they can
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get
any information from the Internet which was not present that time.
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But
again in most of the time,
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people
ask to
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join
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teachers
to them with due
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respect
.
Even though
the way of involvement of
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teachers
in our
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day to day
life is
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changed
, we general
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people
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respect
our
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teacher
in the same way
.

In sum up, the way of revering of our
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teacher
is changing
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but
not
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reduced
. It is
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because
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people
nowadays are more candid and
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because
the percentage of literacy is
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improved
and
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people
have other options to
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get
information.
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, we need to
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keep
connected with our
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teacher
to know
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more and
we should always
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respect
them.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-41 Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
426 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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