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These days science developments have encouraged people to stay upto 100 and 200 years. Some people beleive its a good thing while others say it will create troubles discuss both veiw and give your opinion v.2

These days science developments have encouraged people to stay upto 100 and 200 years. Some people beleive its a good thing while others say it will create troubles 2
It' s often argued, latest science inventions have persuade abundant group of citizens to believe in these developments and by utilising them they can stay longer. This essay will shed some light on pros and cons of these creations. Firstly, to begin with a group of individuals postulate that science technological inventions have gigantic impact on enhancing their life qualities. Newly created formulas are like real miracles by utilising them they can stay longer up to 200 years these inventions are meritorious development. For instance, these days stem cell therapy is very in which claim treatment of various chronic diseases. On the other hand, few tax payers presume these developments are not real and provides false hopes to patients possess chronic diseases like blood cancer can be treated. This creates a state of conflicts among individuals and they struggle even hard to earn some extra income and save it for future retirements. It also arouse false hopes in dying people. To recapitulate, I postulate that these inventions and developments are nothing but a business tact to earn huge capital from communities. A balance approach can support users before adopting any newly created medical formulas which they consider as life enhancer.
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often
argued,
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latest
science inventions have
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persuade
abundant group of citizens to believe in these
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developments
and by
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utilising
them they can stay longer. This essay will shed
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some
light on pros and cons of these creations.

Firstly
, to
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begin
with a group of individuals
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postulate
that science technological inventions have gigantic impact on enhancing their life qualities.
Newly
created formulas are like real miracles by
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utilising
them they can stay longer up to 200 years these inventions are meritorious
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development
.
For instance
, these days stem cell therapy is
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very
in which claim treatment of various chronic diseases.

On the other hand
, few tax payers presume these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developments
are not real and provides false hopes to patients possess chronic diseases like blood cancer can
be treated
. This creates a state of conflicts among
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
individuals and
they struggle even
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hard
to earn
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some
extra income and save it for future retirements. It
also
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arouse
false hopes in dying
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people
.

To recapitulate, I postulate that these inventions and
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developments
are nothing
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but
a business tact to earn huge capital from communities. A balance approach can support users
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before
adopting any
newly
created medical formulas which they consider as life enhancer.
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IELTS essay These days science developments have encouraged people to stay upto 100 and 200 years. Some people beleive its a good thing while others say it will create troubles 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
200 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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