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TPO 4 _ Independent TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

TPO 4 _ Independent Task In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Since the majority of adults spend a considerable amount of their time at work, job satisfaction is instrumental in the well-being of an individual. This essay will first discuss freedom and compensation is a significant contributor to job satisfaction, and then discuss that it is not possible to satisfy all the workers. Firstly, The employer should allow the employees to work on the own flexible timings. Productivity could increase providing that employees are given a free hand in working hours. This could assist the people to have a balanced work life, which means less stress and workers can concentrate on their task on their own time. For example, companies like Google encourage their people to work on their own space and time. As a result, 90% of employees are satisfied with their work. Secondly, wages are imperative if employees are paid what they deserved to be paid there are a high possibility that satisfaction could improve. As per the article by job site Seek. com, many people actively seeking a job because of less pay. Despite this, It is impossible for employers to keep everyone happy because individual responsibility is different. It is difficult for the companies to legislate rules to please everyone and companies have to meet an obligation to their client. This makes them arduous to provide a free hand to their worker's so some managers keep very close vigilance on the subordinates to meet the deadlines. Thus, may dissatisfy some workers. For example, although Indian companies have the best employment benefits, the job satisfaction is below 50%. To conclude, job satisfaction is having very big impact on personal wellbeing, however, it is strenuous to meet the expectation of every employee.
Since the majority of adults spend a considerable amount of their time at
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work
,
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job
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satisfaction
is instrumental in the well-being of an individual. This essay will
first
discuss freedom and compensation is a significant contributor to
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job
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satisfaction
, and then discuss that it is not possible to satisfy all the workers.

Firstly
, The employer should
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allow
the
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employees
to
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work
on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
flexible timings. Productivity could increase providing that
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employees
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a free hand in working hours. This could assist the
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people
to have a balanced
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work
life, which means less
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stress
and workers can concentrate on their task on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
time.
For example
,
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companies
like Google encourage their
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people
to
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work
on their
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own
space and time.
As a result
, 90% of
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employees
are satisfied
with their
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work
.
Secondly
, wages are imperative if
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employees
are paid
what they deserved to
be paid
there are a high possibility that
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satisfaction
could
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improve
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
per the article by
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job
site Seek.
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com
,
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many
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people
actively
seeking a
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job
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because
of less pay.

Despite this, It is impossible for employers to
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keep
everyone happy
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because
individual responsibility is
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different
. It is difficult for the
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companies
to legislate
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rules
to
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please
everyone and
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companies
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have to
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meet
an obligation to their client. This
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makes
them arduous to provide a free hand to their worker's
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so
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some
managers
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keep
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very
close vigilance on the subordinates to
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meet
the deadlines.
Thus
, may dissatisfy
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some
workers.
For example
, although Indian
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companies
have the best employment benefits, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
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satisfaction
is below 50%.

To conclude
,
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job
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satisfaction
is having
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very
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big
impact on personal
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wellbeing
,
however
, it is strenuous to
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meet
the expectation of every
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employee
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 4 _ Independent Task In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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