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TPO 34, Q4Explain how the experiment described by the professor illustrates the familiarity principle. v.1

TPO 34, Q4Explain how the experiment described by the professor illustrates the familiarity principle. v. 1
The past hundred of years, books is considered to be the ultimate source of knowledge. In recent times, it has been observed that children are favouring other sources of leisure than reading books. This essay will shed some light on the reasons for this behaviour, ranging from the significant involvement in video games and online media, like movies and television series. Also, provide some solutions to motivate them on reading books by parents. Observing the technological advancement, video games and computers with internet, have reduced its cost significantly. Due to this, it is available to a large public. Young generation prefer to spend their free time after school with playing video games or watching movies on platforms like Netflix. Because of these substitutes, the habit of reading has perished. My neighbour's son usually suggests me to watch certain movies or exchange Video game disks, however, I have never noticed him talking about books. Due to these factors, it is believed that books are not the priority for children for fun. However, the habits of games and movies presented above could be altered. Parents should introduce their children to books similar to the movies they cherish. Children like to be awarded for task achievements in the form of presents. Parents should ask them to read and summarize stories and intern provide them with things they cherish. This would in start motivate them and slowly introduce the habit of reading in their leisure time. To conclude, access of video games and online media entertainment has left no time for children to read books for fun, however, associating books with movies or characters from their cartoon, luring them to read in return for presents. Parents at home can encourage them by the proposed solutions to start the habit of reading.
The past hundred of years,
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books
is considered
to be the ultimate source of knowledge. In recent times, it has
been observed
that
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children
are
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favouring
other sources of leisure than
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reading
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books
. This essay will shed
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some
light on the reasons for this
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behaviour
, ranging from the significant involvement in
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video
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games
and online media, like
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movies
and television series.
Also
, provide
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some
solutions to motivate them on
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reading
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books
by parents.

Observing the technological advancement,
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video
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games
and computers with internet, have
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reduced
its cost
significantly
. Due to this, it is available to a large public. Young generation prefer to spend their free time after school with playing
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video
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games
or watching
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movies
on platforms like Netflix.
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Because
of these substitutes, the
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habit
of
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reading
has perished. My
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neighbour
's son
usually
suggests me to
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watch
certain
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movies
or
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exchange


Video game disks,
however
, I have never noticed him talking about
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books
. Due to these factors, it
is believed
that
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books
are not the priority for
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children
for fun.

However
, the
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habits
of
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games
and
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movies
presented above could
be altered
. Parents should introduce their
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children
to
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books
similar to the
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movies
they cherish.
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Children
like to
be awarded
for task achievements in the form of presents. Parents should ask them to read and summarize stories and intern provide them with things they cherish. This would in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
motivate them and
slowly
introduce the
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habit
of
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reading
in their leisure time.

To conclude
, access of
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video
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games
and online media entertainment has
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left
no time for
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children
to read
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books
for fun,
however
, associating
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books
with
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movies
or characters from their cartoon, luring them to read in return for presents. Parents at home can encourage them by the proposed solutions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
the
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habit
of
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reading
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 34, Q4Explain how the experiment described by the professor illustrates the familiarity principle. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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