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TPO 26Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo v.2

TPO 26 It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo v. 2
It goes without saying that since the dawn of civilization, the job has played a prevailing role in every individual' s life. The most controversial part of this issue is jobs for new employees. The inevitable question which has invariably engendered heat debated among academicians is whether it is better for children to choose jobs similar to their parents' job or they opt so different from their parent' s job. Therefore, a plethora of people are the leading components of the claim that childrens must have different job from their fathers. Whereas others hold exact opposite perspective and believe that it is so logic that children chose jobs that are similar to fathers' work. I am, nonetheless to first convention, inclined toward the opinion that kids should choose the job that is similar to the parents' duty. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs will aptly elucidate a cursory glance at the outstanding reasons. The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it is very significant that a person chose a job which he is familiar with it. Parent have abundant experience in their job and white their hairs in this way. (They have a lot of experience. ) On the other hands, children are amatour in their field of works; may be they attain some information especially theoretical data in their major. Had they chose jobs which are similar to their parents' , new employees work better in their field because of parents' experience. For a personal experience as an example, my parents especially my father help me a lot in choosing the major and jobs. He is a professor in University of Isfahan, and has a lot of experience in teaching. He said me tactics of teaching, increasing the patient during the work, etc. , so that I learn a lot of approaches for teaching; although, I am only 21 years old. Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that successfulness in these children is higher than others. They can readily get the sense of satisfication through attaining more money because they learn the way of making money via their parents. The noteworthy statistic, revealed by a recent social research conducted in two persons, shows that the one who has a job that is similar to his father' s job is happier and is more satisfied in his life than the other one who has a different job from his parents' job. So the latter person not only doesn' t have adequate money for daily life but also can' t create the sense of happiness for his family. To recapitulate, all the enumerated reasons converge to the point that it is a good advise that children opt works that are similar to their parents' jobs. However, that was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are some other reasons and examples, challenging the claim, which are not mentioned above. Finally, it is suggested that a survey is conducted to find out whether people have experienced valuable by choosing a fathers' job or not.
It goes without saying that since the dawn of civilization, the
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job
has played a prevailing role in every
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individual&
#039; s life. The most controversial part of this issue is
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jobs
for new employees. The inevitable question which has
invariably
engendered heat debated among academicians is whether it is better for
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children
to choose
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jobs
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similar
to their
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parents&
#039;
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job or
they opt
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so
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different
from their
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parent&
#039; s
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job
.
Therefore
, a plethora of
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people
are the leading components of the claim that
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childrens
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must
have
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different
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job
from their
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fathers
. Whereas others hold exact opposite perspective and believe that it is
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so
logic that
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children
chose
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jobs
that are
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similar
to
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fathers&
#039;
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work
. I am, nonetheless to
first
convention, inclined toward the opinion that kids should choose the
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job
that is
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similar
to the
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parents&
#039; duty. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs will
aptly
elucidate a cursory glance at the outstanding reasons.

The
first
exquisite point to
be mentioned
is that it is
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very
significant that a person chose a
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job
which he is familiar with it.
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Parent
have abundant
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experience
in their
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job
and white their hairs in this way. (They have a
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lot
of
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experience
.
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)
On the
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other
hands,
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children
are
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amatour
in their field of works;
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may be
they attain
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some
information
especially
theoretical data in their major. Had they
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chose
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jobs
which are
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similar
to their
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parents&
#039;
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,
new employees
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work
better in their field
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because
of
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parents&
#039;
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experience
. For a personal
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experience
as an example, my
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parents
especially
my
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father
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help
me a
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lot
in choosing the major and
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jobs
. He is a professor in University of Isfahan, and has a
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lot
of
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experience
in teaching. He
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said
me tactics of teaching, increasing the patient during the
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work
, etc.
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,
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so
that I learn a
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lot
of approaches for teaching; although, I am
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only
21 years
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old
.

Furthermore
, it
is established
beyond doubt that successfulness in these
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children
is higher than others. They can
readily
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get
the sense of
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satisfication
through attaining more money
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because
they learn the way of making money via their
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parents
. The noteworthy statistic, revealed by
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a recent social research
conducted in two persons,
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shows
that the one who has a
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job
that is
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similar
to his
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father&
#039; s
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job
is happier and is more satisfied in his life than the
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other
one who has a
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different
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job
from his
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parents&
#039;
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job
.
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So
the latter person not
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only
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doesn&
#039; t have adequate money for daily life
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but
also
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can&
#039; t create the sense of happiness for his family.

To recapitulate, all the enumerated reasons converge to the point that it is a
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good
advise that
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children
opt works that are
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similar
to their
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parents&
#039;
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jobs
.
However
, that was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are
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some
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other
reasons and examples, challenging the claim, which are not mentioned above.
Finally
, it
is suggested
that a survey
is conducted
to find out whether
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people
have experienced valuable by choosing a
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fathers&
#039;
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job
or not.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Mistakes
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Flora Lewis

IELTS essay TPO 26 It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
507 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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