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tpo 26-2Some people like to have their cell or mobile phone with them at all times. Other people prefer not to bring their cell or mobile phone with them everywhere they go, or they choose not to own one at all. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v.1

tpo 26-2Some people like to have their cell or mobile phone with them at all times. Other people prefer not to bring their cell or mobile phone with them everywhere they go, or they choose not to own one at all. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1
It is said that particular criminals could be useful in doing free work in order to help the society instead of just keeping them all in prison. Personally, I am on the same wavelength on this matter. As criminals do nothing useful at the prison, they are no more than just consumers who are locked in a certain area. However, if they do particular duties, it will be way better as punishment will not contribute only a negative effect on prisoners but a good impact on community too. For example, it is good because it is super good. Moreover, it is better to let them do this work. Indeed, the trend has to change. It has been a good idea since it was introduced. For instance, now it will lead to some circumstances. This statement supports the idea of changing the trend and start a new page of what is matter. Nevertheless, if it is needed to count the number of words, it is obligatory to say that this number will be appropriate enough to beat the previous records. To conclude, I have to say that it will change both the prisoners life and community stability. That is why it should be encouraged for prisons to let criminals to work on unpaid work for the sake of the community.
It
is said
that particular criminals could be useful in doing free work in order to
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help
the society
instead
of
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just
keeping them all in prison.
Personally
, I am on the same wavelength on this matter.

As criminals do nothing useful at the prison, they are no more than
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just
consumers who
are locked
in a certain area.
However
, if they do particular duties, it will be way better as punishment will not contribute
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only
a
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negative
effect on prisoners
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but
a
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good
impact on community too.
For example
, it is
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good
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because
it is super
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
.
Moreover
, it is better to
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let
them do this work.

Indeed
, the trend
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has to
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change
. It has been a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
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idea
since it
was introduced
.
For instance
,
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now
it will lead to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
circumstances. This statement supports the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of changing the trend and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
a new page of what is matter.
Nevertheless
, if it
is needed
to count the number of words, it is obligatory to say that this number will be appropriate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to beat the previous records.

To conclude
, I
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have to
say that it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
both the prisoners life and community stability.
That is
why it should
be encouraged
for prisons to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
criminals to work on unpaid work for the sake of the community.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay tpo 26-2Some people like to have their cell or mobile phone with them at all times. Other people prefer not to bring their cell or mobile phone with them everywhere they go, or they choose not to own one at all. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
219 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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