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TPO-23- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your v.4

TPO-23- In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your v. 4
In this century, since technological advances have led our lives to a faster medium, people have to adjust their lives and performance to cope well with these swift movements. When it comes to working pace in individual’s your job, controversy surrounds the issue of whether we should work rapidly and risk making mistakes or perform slowly and make a guarantee that everything is right. I am of the opinion that we should apply a fast reaction to everything in our life and also our career, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this matter. One of the remarkable aspects of the ongoing discussion which needs to be reflected is that a fast performance will raise our productivity in our working place and will further bring us many advances in comparison to other employees. As we have a nimble performance regarding different requests, we can do many tasks at the same time. As a matter of fact, we, as a multifaceted person, are always in the center of attention from all superior managers and we will get any significant task which may come from a prospective customer. Therefore, this advantage might make us a head and shoulder above other employees, and we may get promoted more often than a typical employee. My father, for instance, once worked for an international company in our country. Half of the workers and managers were strangers speaking in different languages. As on those days, job requirements did not mention any prerequisite to know the second language; all the workers could not speak English to communicate with other members. Thanks to my dad' s familiarity with the English language, he was the only person who made the connection of the national managers with the stranger ones. Consequently, he got the highest salary and attention soon among the workers. Another aspect of the topic which demands a keen contemplation is that to reach to better financial and social status, we have to take high risks and perform quickly. Achieving success in life is very challenging, it not only requires careful planning with a high level of knowledge but also it needs venturing. In essence, people should take some significant risks in their life to reach their desired goals, and this is not possible even if they work prudently with a good pace. To illustrate, perhaps my cousin' s experience can shed more light on this matter. His company once went bankruptcy because of the flawed working strategy. However, after applying for a rigorous program with a lot of risks, their business made a high profit out of their new product. On the other hand, as quality always plays a determining role in most of the practical outcomes, we should take this fact into account that working quickly and making mistakes may lead us away from acquiring it. If we want to keep our job the best and provide the highest quality, we ought to work more slowly to see the mistakes might have happened during the work. In fact, a manager has pledged to its customer to make the finest product or work. Thus, it is only possible by checking and working hard for many hours. Taking into consideration all aspects mentioned above, I am pretty convinced that there are many solid reasons to support the idea of working quickly as well as risk making mistakes. Although this might have some drawbacks on the quality our performance, we can enhance our efficiency in working place and also may get a better stance.
In this century, since technological advances have led our
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lives
to a faster medium,
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people
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have to
adjust their
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lives
and
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performance
to cope well with these swift movements. When it
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comes
to
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working
pace in individual’s your job, controversy surrounds the issue of whether we should
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work
rapidly
and
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risk
making
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mistakes
or perform
slowly
and
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make
a guarantee that everything is right. I am of the opinion that we should apply a
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fast
reaction to everything in our life and
also
our career, and the following explanations will
further
elaborate on this matter.

One of the remarkable aspects of the ongoing discussion which needs to
be reflected
is that a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
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performance
will raise our productivity in our
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working
place and will
further
bring us
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advances
in comparison
to
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other
employees. As we have a nimble
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
performance
regarding
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
requests, we can do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
tasks at the same time. As a matter of fact, we, as a multifaceted person, are always in the center of attention from all superior
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managers and
we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
any significant task which may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
from a prospective customer.
Therefore
, this advantage might
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make
us a head and shoulder above
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other
employees, and we may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
promoted more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
than a typical employee. My father,
for instance
, once worked for an international
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in our country. Half of the workers and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
managers
were strangers speaking in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
languages. As on those days, job requirements did not mention any prerequisite to know the second language; all the workers could not speak English to communicate with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
members. Thanks to my
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dad&
#039; s familiarity with the English language, he was the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
person who made the connection of the national
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
managers
with the stranger ones.
Consequently
, he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
the highest salary and attention
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
among the workers.

Another aspect of the topic which demands a keen contemplation is that to reach to better financial and social status, we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
take high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
risks
and perform
quickly
. Achieving success in life is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
challenging, it not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
requires careful planning with a high level of knowledge
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
it needs venturing. In essence,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
significant
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risks
in their life to reach their desired goals, and this is not possible even if they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
prudently
with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
pace. To illustrate, perhaps my
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cousin&
#039; s experience can shed more light on this matter. His
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
once went bankruptcy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the flawed
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working
strategy.
However
, after applying for a rigorous program with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
risks
, their business made a high profit out of their new product.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, as quality always plays a determining role in most of the practical outcomes, we should take this fact into account that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
quickly
and making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistakes
may lead us away from acquiring it. If we want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
our job the best and provide the highest quality, we ought to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
more
slowly
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistakes
might have happened during the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. In fact, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manager
has pledged to its customer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the finest product or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
.
Thus
, it is
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only
possible by checking and
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working
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hard
for
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many
hours.

Taking into consideration all aspects mentioned above, I am pretty convinced that there are
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many
solid reasons to support the
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idea
of
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working
quickly
as well
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
risk
making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistakes
. Although this might have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
drawbacks on the quality our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
performance
, we can enhance our efficiency in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
place and
also
may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a better stance.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-23- In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
586 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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