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Essay topics: TPO-19 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Essay topics: TPO-19 - Independent Writing Task In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Nowadays sports are part and parcel of our day to day life. Everyone is connected to some kind of sports to some extent. It has been seen that the sportsman himself advertises some sports related products. This essay will discuss the positives and negatives of this trend. One of the obvious benefits of becoming a model of some sport materials is to earn more money. If an athlete does some advertisements for a product then the company provides him with a handsome package. For example, world famous football icon Ronaldo earns millions of dollars by advertisements. Moreover, it is a way of becoming more famous. We know many players because we saw them in the television doing advertisement of a product. On the contrary, there are some problems of this trend as well. When a young player starts to earn money at such an early age, he may not know what to do with it. He may end up wasting all the money on useless party, friends, alcohol etc. It is observed in the daily news that many young players are throwing parties without any reason. In addition, if a player focuses too much on advertisements then his main job which is playing, is affected severely. As a result, he may perform poorly, which also results in decreasing his advertisement contracts. Eventually, it can destroy one's career if he is too reckless. To summarize, we can say that although there is no harm if a player do some advertisements for some financial gain and to earn more popularity, too much advertisement can destroy his career.
Nowadays
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sports
are part and parcel of our
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day to day
life. Everyone
is connected
to
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some
kind of
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sports
to
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some
extent. It has been
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seen
that the sportsman himself advertises
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some
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sports
related products. This essay will discuss the positives and negatives of this trend.

One of the obvious benefits of becoming a model of
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some
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sport
materials is to
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earn
more money. If an athlete does
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some
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advertisements
for a product then the
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company
provides him with a handsome package.
For example
, world
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famous
football icon Ronaldo
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earns
millions of dollars by
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advertisements
.
Moreover
, it is a way of becoming more
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famous
. We know
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many
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players
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because
we
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saw
them in the television doing
The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
advertisement of
a product.

On the contrary
, there are
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some
problems of this trend
as well
. When a young
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player
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starts
to
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earn
money at such an early age, he may not know what to do with it. He may
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end
up wasting all the money on useless party, friends, alcohol etc. It
is observed
in the daily news that
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many
young
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players
are throwing parties without any reason.
In addition
, if a
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player
focuses too much on
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advertisements
then his main job which is playing, is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
severely
.
As a result
, he may perform
poorly
, which
also
results in decreasing his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
contracts.
Eventually
, it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroy
one's career if he is too reckless.

To summarize
, we can say that although there is no harm if a
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player
do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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advertisements
for
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some
financial gain and to
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earn
more popularity, too much
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advertisement
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroy
his career.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topics: TPO-19 - Independent Writing Task In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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