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TPO 19_ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO 19_ In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
That getting information from many different resources plays an absolute significant role in spread spectrum of a modern person’s life is an undeniable fact. Should people realize the advantages of using different news resources in today’s complicated world they will ponder over it much more scrupulously. This issue has recently been the topic of debate among sociologists. In the existence of all points of view, I do believe that the two paramount objectives of getting news from many different resources are being aware of the all international issues and finding reliable resources. Seeing different points of view about a single event can be noted as another rationale. To begin with, it is incontrovertibly axiomatic that checking different news resources results in being aware of the all international issues. In other words if we only check just one news channel or website, we might lose an important event. For example during the last summer, the Olympic games were held in Brazil, and because I am a big fan of swimming competitions, I had to check different sources to get access to news about the winners of gold medals. The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that nowadays finding reliable news resources is really hard. That is to say, most people believe that some news agencies are not independent and trusting them is a big mistake. To elucidate, once I was looking for the number of victims of AIDS in Africa and surprisingly I understood that some websites tend to hide the true number of victims. Therefore on no account can underrate efficacy of checking numerous sources with regards to finding a trust-able resource. Having discussed this issue from this point of view, I am going to empower it by the following discussion. Sometimes we need to see an event from different aspects and if we limit ourselves to a few resources, we may neglect other aspects which might be important. It’s like seeing the bright sight of the moon and forgetting about the dark side. For example when a new dam had been constructed in our state, most of the news resources were talking about the benefits of this dam for local agriculture and nobody was mentioning the damages caused by construction process to traditional inhabitants of the river like fishes and frogs. By taking all above-mentioned arguments to the consideration, the following conclusion can be drawn about the issue. Inasmuch as getting up-to-date, reliable and comprehensive news has profound effects on the complexity of our point of view about an event, underestimating the significance of checking different news sources in not logical.
That getting information from
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resources plays an absolute significant role in spread spectrum of a modern person’s life is an undeniable fact. Should
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people
realize the advantages of using
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different
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news
resources in
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today
’s complicated world they will ponder over it much more
scrupulously
. This
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issue
has recently been the topic of debate among sociologists. In the existence of all
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points
of
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view
, I do believe that the two paramount objectives of getting
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news
from
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many
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different
resources are being aware of the all international
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issues
and finding reliable resources. Seeing
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different
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points
of
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view
about a single
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event
can
be noted
as another rationale.

To
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begin
with, it is
incontrovertibly
axiomatic that checking
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different
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news
resources results in being aware of the all international
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issues
.
In other words
if we
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only
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check
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just
one
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news
channel or website, we might lose an
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important
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event
.
For example
during the last summer, the
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Olympic games
were held
in Brazil, and
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because
I am a
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big
fan of swimming competitions, I had to
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check
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different
sources to
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get
access to
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news
about the winners of gold medals.

The second reason why I advocate this
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point
of
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view
lies in the fact that nowadays finding reliable
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news
resources is
really
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hard
.
That is
to say, most
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people
believe that
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some
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news
agencies are not independent and trusting them is a
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big
mistake. To elucidate, once I was looking for the number of victims of AIDS in Africa and
surprisingly
I understood that
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some
websites tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hide
the true number of victims.
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Therefore
on no account can underrate efficacy of checking numerous sources
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
finding a trust-able resource.

Having discussed this
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issue
from this
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point
of
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view
, I am going to empower it by the following discussion.
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Sometimes
we need to
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see
an
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event
from
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different
aspects and if we limit ourselves to a few resources, we may neglect other aspects which might be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
. It’s like seeing the bright sight of the moon and forgetting about the dark side.
For example
when a
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new
dam had
been constructed
in our state, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
resources were talking about the benefits of this dam for local agriculture and nobody was mentioning the damages caused by construction process to traditional inhabitants of the river like fishes and frogs.

By taking all above-mentioned arguments to the consideration, the following conclusion can
be drawn
about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
. Inasmuch as getting up-to-date, reliable and comprehensive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
has profound effects on the complexity of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
point
of
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view
about an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
, underestimating the significance of checking
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different
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news
sources in not logical.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO 19_ In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
439 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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