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tpo 19-6Using the examples of the albatross and the fulmar, explain two special adaptations that have developed to help seabirds find food. v.1

tpo 19-6Using the examples of the albatross and the fulmar, explain two special adaptations that have developed to help seabirds find food. v. 1
It is sometimes argued that space exploration is a money-wasting investment. While I agree with this to some extent, I also believe that space research can bring about some undeniable benefits to human being. On the one hand, there are several reasons why investing in space research is regarded as a waste of money. Admittedly, space exploration projects usually require a huge initial investment, but it is not guaranteed that there would be some fruitful findings at the end of the projects. As a result, this would lead to some doubts on the effectiveness of these long-term researches. In addition, a considerable amount of money spent on space research would put governments under a financial pressure, resulting in a limited room of budget for other governmental spending such as improving public healthcare services or enhancing education system. On the other hand, I would argue that space exploration might have some foreseeable benefits. First, undertaking space studies would help people to develop a deeper understanding of the universe, contributing to the improvement of existing literature and theoretical concepts. Second, the outcomes of these researches might lead to a number of economic advantages. For instance, new planets found out by space scientists may provide travel industry with a new tourist destination. In addition, these promising lands can serve as a new place to live for human, helping governments to deal with the over-population problem. In conclusion, despite the disadvantages of carrying out space studies, it seems to me that the advantages are more significant.
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exploration is a money-wasting investment. While I
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can bring about
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undeniable benefits to human being.

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is regarded
as a waste of money.
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,
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exploration projects
usually
require a huge initial investment,
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but
it is not guaranteed that there would be
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some
fruitful findings at the
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end
of the projects.
As a result
, this would lead to
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some
doubts on the effectiveness of these long-term
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.
In addition
, a considerable amount of money spent on
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space
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research
would put
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governments
under a financial pressure, resulting in a limited room of budget for other governmental spending such as improving public healthcare services or enhancing education system.

On the other hand
, I would argue that
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exploration might have
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foreseeable benefits.
First
, undertaking
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studies would
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help
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people
to develop a deeper understanding of the universe, contributing to the improvement of existing literature and theoretical concepts. Second, the outcomes of these
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researches
might lead to a number of economic advantages.
For instance
, new planets found out by
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space
scientists may provide travel industry with a new tourist destination.
In addition
, these promising lands can serve as a new place to
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live
for human, helping
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governments
to deal with the over-population problem.

In conclusion
, despite the disadvantages of carrying out
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studies, it seems to me that the advantages are more significant.
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IELTS essay tpo 19-6Using the examples of the albatross and the fulmar, explain two special adaptations that have developed to help seabirds find food. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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