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TPO 12 - Question 6Using points and examples from the talk, explain how substitute goods and complement goods influence the demand for a particular product. v.1

TPO 12 - Question 6Using points and examples from the talk, explain how substitute goods and complement goods influence the demand for a particular product. v. 1
It is an irrefutable fact that traffic congestion has become a serious problem in many countries. Although many people believe that constructing more and wider roads is the best solution to mitigate this problem, I would agree with those who believe that building train and subway lines is a better way to reduce traffic jam. On the one hand, there are some clear reasons why the extension and construction of roads can alleviate the volume of traffic. Firstly, the existing roads are not wide enough to accommodate the number of vehicles on the roads. This, in turn, leads to traffic jams, especially in cities. Secondly, if there are better networks of roads, people will be able to take an alternative route to avoid crowd when traffic congestion occurs. However, I do not agree with this view because wider and better roads might encourage people to buy cars. In a short period of time traffic will increase. On the other hand, there are many reasons why some people believe that the government spending money on building train and subway lines is a better decision to tackle traffic jams. One reason is that trains are faster than buses or cars so people tend to prefer a train over a car, especially those who commute to work. This may relieve the pressure on existing roads. Secondly, in many cities, there is not enough land available to construct or extend roads. By contrast, a subway network is built underground and there is no need to worry about scarcity of land. Therefore, building a subway line is certainly a viable option. In conclusion, it is true that constructing more and wider roads reduces traffic but it is a temporary solution as good roads prompt people to buy private vehicles. I firmly believe that governments should allocate funds to build train and subway lines rather than investing money on roads.
It is an irrefutable fact that
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traffic
congestion has become a serious problem in
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many
countries. Although
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many
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people
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believe
that constructing more and wider
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roads
is the best solution to mitigate this problem, I would
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agree
with those who
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believe
that building
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train
and
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subway
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lines
is a
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better
way to
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reduce
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traffic
jam.

On the one hand, there are
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some
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clear
reasons why the extension and construction of
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roads
can alleviate the volume of
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traffic
.
Firstly
, the existing
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roads
are not wide
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enough
to accommodate the number of vehicles on the
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roads
. This, in turn, leads to
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traffic
jams,
especially
in cities.
Secondly
, if there are
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better
networks of
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roads
,
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people
will be able to take an alternative route to avoid crowd when
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traffic
congestion occurs.
However
, I do not
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agree
with this view
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because
wider and
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better
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roads
might encourage
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people
to
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buy
cars. In a short period of time
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traffic
will increase.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
reasons why
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some
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people
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believe
that the
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government
spending money on building
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train
and
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subway
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lines
is a
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better
decision to tackle
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traffic
jams. One reason is that
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trains
are faster than buses or cars
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so
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people
tend to prefer a
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train
over a car,
especially
those who commute to work. This may relieve the pressure on existing
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roads
.
Secondly
, in
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many
cities, there is not
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enough
land available to construct or extend
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roads
. By contrast, a
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subway
network
is built
underground and there is no need to worry about scarcity of land.
Therefore
, building a
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subway
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line
is
certainly
a viable option.

In conclusion
, it is true that constructing more and wider
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roads
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reduces
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traffic
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but
it is a temporary solution as
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good
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roads
prompt
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people
to
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buy
private vehicles. I
firmly
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believe
that
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governments
should allocate funds to build
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train
and
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subway
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lines
rather
than investing money on
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roads
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay TPO 12 - Question 6Using points and examples from the talk, explain how substitute goods and complement goods influence the demand for a particular product. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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