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TPO 03 - Question 2 Some students prefer to work on class assignments by themselves. Others believe it is better to work in a group. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v.1

TPO 03 - Question 2 Some students prefer to work on class assignments by themselves. Others believe it is better to work in a group. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1
Nowadays, people prefer to boycott meat or fish. This is thought to improve and develop the health conditions in addition to protecting the whole environment. Although there are possible advantages of being a vegetarian which will be discussed in this essay, I believe that it will harm our health due to several drawbacks. The mindset has changed a lot throughout the last decades and people’s lifestyle has been significantly altered. A remarkable difference is the approach of not eating meat or fish. As interesting as it might sound, such a decision will definitely protect our world. Different animals such as fish and cows will not be used as food for humans which means that they will live longer. In other words, some people might consider eating meat or fish an animal abusive act. Furthermore, it is claimed that obesity can be avoided due to not eating fat-saturated food. This reduces the risk of heart-related problems as meat is one of the factors which causes blockage of blood vessels. However, do these benefits outweigh the disadvantages? It is worth noting the plethora of important nutrients supplied by those meals. Our body needs an enough amount of protein, different vitamins and iron which are all found in fish and meat, so there is no doubt that eating none of them will decline the levels of those nutrients in our body leading to various problems such as weaker muscles as a result of the deficiency of certain vitamins. We cannot simply turn a blind eye on other health problems which might occur. For instance, the body might start suffering from anemia due to lower iron levels. In conclusion, as previously discussed, being a vegetarian has its own pros and cons. From my own perspective, I believe that eating fish and meat in moderate quantities is essential for a healthy body.
Nowadays,
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people
prefer to boycott
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meat
or fish. This is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to
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improve
and develop the health conditions
in addition
to protecting the whole environment. Although there are possible advantages of being a vegetarian which will
be discussed
in this essay, I believe that it will harm our health due to several drawbacks.

The mindset has
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changed
a lot throughout the last decades and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s lifestyle has been
significantly
altered. A remarkable difference is the approach of not
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eating
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meat
or fish. As interesting as it
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might
sound, such a decision will definitely protect our world.
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Different
animals such as fish and cows will not be
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used
as food for humans which means that they will
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live
longer.
In other words
,
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some
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people
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might
consider
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eating
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meat
or fish an animal abusive act.
Furthermore
, it
is claimed
that obesity can
be avoided
due to not
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eating
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fat
-saturated food. This
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reduces
the
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risk
of heart-related problems as
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meat
is one of the factors which causes blockage of blood vessels.
However
, do these benefits outweigh the disadvantages?

It is worth noting the plethora of
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important
nutrients supplied by those meals. Our
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body
needs an
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enough
amount of protein,
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different
vitamins and iron which are all found in fish and
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meat
,
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so
there is no doubt that
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eating
none of them will decline the levels of those nutrients in our
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body
leading to various problems such as weaker muscles
as a result
of the deficiency of certain vitamins. We cannot
simply
turn a blind eye on other health problems which
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might
occur.
For instance
, the
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body
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might
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start
suffering from anemia due to lower iron levels.

In conclusion
, as previously discussed, being a vegetarian has its
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own
pros and cons. From my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
perspective, I believe that
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eating
fish and
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meat
in moderate quantities is essential for a healthy
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body
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO 03 - Question 2 Some students prefer to work on class assignments by themselves. Others believe it is better to work in a group. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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