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Tourists to other countries need to follow local customs and behaviours. A few people consider it truthful. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Tourists to other countries need to follow local customs and behaviours. A few people consider it truthful. v. 2
Although it is thought by some that tourist should cultivate the lifestyle and moral stand of a community, others believe that visited country ought to accept another culture by the visitors. As well as giving my personal opinion, this essay will discuss why a local government custom and behaviour should be extended, retained, and conversely, the benefits of embracing the other arts. On the one hand, culture and behavioural activities are the core of a land, In another for it not to go into extinction, it should be retained. More specifically, for people visiting. Continuous practicing of these norms would develop the social ways of life of that community. What is more, generations to come would know the values, and acts of their background. In Africa, for example, respect is a key value and it cannot be traded for anything. Therefore, this attitude would allow the continuation of such activity. Moreover, welcoming another culture, on the other hand, is often believed to improve the growth of an economy. Allowing other perception and background would bring about exposure, because the knowledge and ideas visitors without disparity would be used to establish, correct and modify theirs to become a standard. Not only would their standard of living, but also their economic growth would increase, since new ideas are always generated and put in place. For instance, Nigeria today was reported by international data analysis to be among the world best, simply because of her flexibility to another culture. Whereby, her economy grown vastly. To sum up, while people may vary in their opinion, I, from my point of view, then embracing other ways of life and behaviour activities would bolster the economy.
Although it is
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thought
by
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some
that tourist should cultivate the lifestyle and moral stand of a community, others believe that visited country ought to accept another
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culture
by the visitors.
As well
as giving my personal opinion, this essay will discuss why a local
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government
custom and
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behaviour
should
be extended
, retained, and
conversely
, the benefits of embracing the
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other
arts.

On the one hand,
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culture
and
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behavioural
activities are the core of a land, In another for it not to go into extinction, it should
be retained
. More
specifically
, for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
visiting. Continuous practicing of these norms would develop the social ways of life of that community.
What is more
, generations to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
would know the values, and acts of their background. In Africa,
for example
, respect is a key value and it cannot
be traded
for anything.
Therefore
, this attitude would
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allow
the continuation of such activity.

Moreover
, welcoming another
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culture
, on the
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other
hand, is
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often
believed to
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improve
the growth of an economy. Allowing
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other
perception and background would bring about exposure,
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because
the knowledge and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
visitors without disparity would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to establish, correct and modify theirs to become a standard. Not
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only
would their standard of living,
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but
also
their economic growth would increase, since new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
are always generated and put in place.
For instance
, Nigeria
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
was reported
by international data analysis to be among the world best,
simply
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because
of her flexibility to another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
. Whereby, her economy grown
vastly
.

To sum up, while
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
may vary in their opinion, I, from my point of view, then embracing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
ways of life and
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
activities would bolster the economy.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Tourists to other countries need to follow local customs and behaviours. A few people consider it truthful. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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