Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

“Tourism should be banned in order to protect local environments, cultures and economies.” To what extent do you agree with this statement? Evaluate the impact of tourism in these three areas.

“Tourism should be banned in order to protect local environments, cultures and economies. ” Evaluate the impact of tourism in these three areas. 3qpm
Introduction A certain School of thought are of the opinion that a total closure of all activities relating to Tourism is a step in the right direction because it is expected to safeguard the immediate environment, peoples ways of life and the economy at large. To a very large extent, I disagree with this except for the area of environment which I believe tourism has a negative impact on. Main Contents Tourism uses nature as part of its products and therefore it creates environmental impacts and it can sometimes contribute to several existing negative effects of tourism on the environment (Buckly, 2011). Transportation sector being a very important area for tourism development provides tourists with best possible movement facility from the sources to their destinations (Yeoman et al. , 2007), various transportation means such as cars, Aeroplanes, trains etc making use of various energy sources such as gas, goal etc, the emission from these sources will most likely release unpleasant gases which will lead to pollution of the air, water and other environmental components. Disease are very likely to reach nearby cities first, but also distant cities with high air travel volumes; a pandemic initiating in Hong Kong can now spread speedily to northern hemisphere cities 111 days earlier than in 1968, (Grais et al. , 2003). We recently saw the outbreak of COVID-19, and how it was transmitted to various countries of the world by travelers coming in to such countries for various reasons of which Tourism tops the list. The continous visit of people to a particular historical site or an area with a Unique culture will in the long run bring about an international recognition to the the way of people living in the area of focus by tourist. International Recognition by tourist and people from various walks of life is expected to then lead to researches, investments etc which is beliefed will improve the Quality of life of the people living in a particular geographical location. In 2016, the travel and tourism sector contributed $2. 3 trillion directly to the global economy. Indirectly, the sector accounted for 10. 2 per cent of global GDP ($7. 6 trillion), 292 million jobs, $1. 5 trillion in exports, and 30 per cent of services exports (World Travel and Tourism Council, 2017). With the help of tourism, persons living within and around a tourist site are expected to be gainfully employed as tour guides, tour drivers, accommodation providers etc due to the various travelling and hotel arrangement of tourists. Also an increase in Tax revenue accruing to the government from various financial and non financial activities influenced by toursits is expected due to various purchases and other expenditures. Summary and Conclusion Finally, having examined and looked at the benefit of tourism on culture and the economy with emphasis on international recognition, higher quality of life, increased employment, increase in tax revenue etc. A critical look at the negative effect on the local environment in the form of environmental pollution and disease transmission helps in enhancing my view that as much as there are numerous benefits of tourism, there are still certain minute areas it has a bad effect on.
Introduction

A certain School of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
are of the opinion that a total closure of all activities relating to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Tourism
is a step in the right direction
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expected
to safeguard the immediate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
peoples
ways of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
and the economy at large. To a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
large extent, I disagree with this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
except for
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
which I believe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on.

Main Contents

Tourism
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
nature as part of its products and
therefore
it creates environmental impacts and it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
contribute to several existing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
(
Possible spelling mistake found.
Buckly
, 2011). Transportation sector being a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
development provides
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
A determiner is probably missing here: "with the best".
with best
possible movement facility from the sources to their destinations (Yeoman et al.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
2007),
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
transportation means such as cars,
Possible spelling mistake. 'Aeroplanes' is British English.
Aeroplanes
, trains etc making
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
energy sources such as gas, goal etc, the emission from these sources will most likely release unpleasant gases which will lead to pollution of the air, water and other environmental components. Disease are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
likely to reach nearby cities
first
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
distant cities with high air travel volumes; a pandemic initiating in Hong Kong can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
spread
speedily
to
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
northern hemisphere
cities 111 days earlier than in 1968, (
Possible spelling mistake found.
Grais
et al.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
2003). We recently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
the outbreak of COVID-19, and how it
was transmitted
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
countries of the world by travelers coming in to such countries for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
reasons of which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Tourism
tops the list.

The
Possible spelling mistake found.
continous
visit of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to a particular historical site or an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
with a Unique culture will in the long run bring about an international recognition to
Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "the" or "the" is left.
the the
way of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
living in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
of focus by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
. International Recognition by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
walks of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expected
to then lead to researches, investments etc which is
Possible spelling mistake found.
beliefed
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the Quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
living in a particular geographical location.

In 2016, the travel and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
sector contributed $2. 3 trillion
directly
to the global economy.
Indirectly
, the sector accounted for 10. 2 per cent of global GDP ($7. 6 trillion), 292 million jobs, $1. 5 trillion in exports, and 30 per cent of services exports (World Travel and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Tourism
Council, 2017). With the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
, persons living within and around a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
site are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expected
to be
gainfully
employed as tour guides, tour drivers, accommodation providers etc due to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
travelling and hotel arrangement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
an increase in Tax revenue accruing to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
financial and
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
non financial
activities influenced by
Possible spelling mistake found.
toursits
is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
expected
due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchases
and other expenditures.

Summary and Conclusion

Finally
, having examined and looked at the benefit of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
on culture and the economy with emphasis on international recognition, higher quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
, increased employment, increase in tax revenue etc. A critical look at the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on the local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
in the form of environmental pollution and disease transmission
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in enhancing my view that as much as there are numerous benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
, there are
still
certain minute
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
it has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
effect on.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay “Tourism should be banned in order to protect local environments, cultures and economies. ” Evaluate the impact of tourism in these three areas.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
529 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • “Tourism should be banned in order to protect local environments, cultures and economies.” To what extent do you agree with this statement? Evaluate the impact of tourism in these three areas.