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Tourism is growing industry. What do you think tourism beings benifits to people and society

Tourism is growing industry. What do you think tourism beings benifits to people and society o6k59
Tourism is very famous all over the world and it is ever growing. People want to travel and spend a quality time with life partner, family and friends. And they also want to get relaxed from burden of work and tufe life. So most of people chose to travel. It brings many benifits to people and society that are well explained in upcoming paragraphs. Firstly, It plays a very crucial role in country's economy and brings job opportunities. In many countries there is a special section for tourism. So it comes with many jobs for people like- tour guide, taxes, etc. When people travel they spend money on different things like- hotels, food, purchase things and manymore. Secondly, when people travel from abroad it enhances love between two communities. People can share their culture and experience. And learn many new things that is very beneficial for people. And with this people also get attached to history that are our roots. We can learn how our ancestors survive and how technology improved. At last, I want to say that tourism is beneficial because it spread love and plays a vital role in economy of a country and this is ever growing industry.
Tourism is
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famous
all over the world and it is ever growing.
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want to
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travel
and spend a quality time with life partner, family and friends. And they
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want to
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get
relaxed from burden of work and
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life.
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most of
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people
chose to
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travel
. It brings
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many
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benifits
to
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people
and society that are well
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explained
in upcoming paragraphs.

Firstly
, It plays a
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crucial role in country's economy and brings job opportunities. In
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countries there is a special section for tourism.
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So
it
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comes
with
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many
jobs for
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people
like- tour guide, taxes, etc. When
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people
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travel
they spend money on
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different
things like- hotels, food,
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purchase
things and
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manymore
.

Secondly
, when
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people
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travel
from abroad it enhances
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love
between two communities.
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People
can share their culture and experience. And learn
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many
new things
that is
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beneficial for
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people
. And with this
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people
also
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get
attached to history that are our roots. We can learn how our ancestors survive and how technology
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improved
.

At last, I want to say that tourism is beneficial
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because
it spread
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love
and plays a vital role in economy of a country and this is ever growing industry.
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IELTS essay Tourism is growing industry. What do you think tourism beings benifits to people and society

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201 words
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