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Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

Tourism plays an important role in the development of the country. Its encouraging people to visit an area and explore the beauty of nature and man made. Globetrotting gives advantages to society and pe will discuss the merits of exploration in upcoming paragraphs, before drawing a logical conclusion. To commence with, there are various advantages of tourism brigs to individuals and society. The first and foremost is that when traveller travelling one place to another place and it explores with whom they are unfamiliar. Multitudes gains a plethora of knowlegde about that palce which they vist like climate, culture, history, environment, food, language and tradition. For
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role in the development of the country. Its encouraging
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people
to visit an area and explore the beauty of nature and
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man
made. Globetrotting gives advantages to society and
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discuss the merits of exploration in upcoming paragraphs,
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before
drawing a logical conclusion. To commence with, there are various advantages of tourism brigs to individuals and society. The
first
and foremost is that when
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travelling one place to another
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place and
it explores with whom they are unfamiliar.
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a plethora of
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knowlegde
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like climate, culture, history, environment, food, language and tradition. For
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IELTS essay Tourism is an ever growing industry. What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
105 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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