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Tourism is a great source of income for a country.

Tourism is a great source of income for a country. wa37n
I agree that a lot of places in world depend upon tourism for their source of income. In content to that if tourist visits then only a city gets livelihood and can flourish properly. First of all I want to convey my views in this context that tourism not only provides living it provides employment, business also. Like for example companies like Make my Trip, Easy go etc are getting maximum business. Secondly if tourist travels, that place become famous and they start getting more tourist. When tourist starts enjoying the economy will rise due to increase in spending On the other hand by visiting places where a few people have to visit at a time a huge amount of visitors arrive then sources get distracted and the enjoyment lacks. For example a few years back in Uttarakhand there was a huge loss of economy and life due to the extreme number of visitors and lack of sources. People are charged higher than actual, they get cheated. Some of the areas the local residents can get into problems if it is not managed properly also experience loss of privacy In conclusion my word of state is tourism is necessary in this modern world, one can discover new places, new tastes, changes in weather, Greenery, For example if we visit India we get different taste in different cities, likewise weather also.
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a lot of
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places
in world depend upon tourism for their source of income. In content to that if
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tourist
visits then
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only
a city
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gets
livelihood and can flourish
properly
.

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First of all
I want to convey my views in this context that tourism not
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only
provides living it provides employment, business
also
. Like
for example
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companies
like
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Make
my Trip, Easy go etc are getting maximum business.

Secondly
if
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tourist
travels, that
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place
become
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famous and
they
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start
getting more
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tourist
.
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When
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tourist
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starts
enjoying the economy will rise due to increase in
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spending


On the other hand
by visiting
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places
where a few
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people
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visit at a time a huge amount of visitors
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arrive
then sources
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distracted and the enjoyment lacks.
For example
a few years back in Uttarakhand there was a huge loss of economy and life due to the extreme number of visitors and lack of sources.

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People
are charged
higher than actual, they
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get
cheated.
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Some of the
areas the local residents can
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get
into problems if it is not managed
properly
also
experience loss of
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privacy


In conclusion
my word of state is tourism is necessary in this modern world, one can discover new
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places
, new tastes,
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changes
in weather, Greenery,
For example
if we visit India we
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get
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different
taste in
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cities,
likewise
weather
also
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IELTS essay Tourism is a great source of income for a country.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
230 words
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