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Topic....vistors should follow others culture and customs, while others argue that host coutres wellcom other behaviour and culture

Topic. . . . vistors should follow others culture and customs, while others argue that host coutres wellcom other behaviour and culture JLoR6
It is considered that Visitors who came from other countries should obey local Convention and lifestyle. While other argue that the host County should become amicable that visitor independent follow their own traditions. I admit that it is obviously debatable issu. This entire essy will discussion both significant views [24/04, 12: 04 pm] Shihabur Rahman: Visitors should Follow local custom and culture has great number of benefits. Frist and formost, to respect other culture and receive with good grace their government rules, every Foreigner shuld follow other couriers customs and rules, for example, many countries beer, and cinema are prohibited. What is more, learning other language and knowing behaviour and fashion what things are trend on these society, people who came from overseas can fucus on customs and behaviour. Furthermore, a recent study from UNESCO reveal that more than 60% of the tourists who know about local lifestyle, are more effective and less facing difficulties there. Finally, The More people know others culture and language, the more they gain experience in life, which help them Their professional lifestyle. [24/04, 12: 17 pm] Shihabur Rahman: On the other hand, it can not be ignored that host County should offers opportunity about various culture and behaviour. To begin with, to improve economic fiscal and attractive to visitors through these facilities, every countries shuold receive others culture positively. Moreover, by providing to tourists maintain their culture and lifestyle in host County not only well distinguished but also came up top preferences to visitors. If government and local people allow to celebrate their own culture, behaviour as well as food, they will earn more money from their. To sum up, my thorough analysis is considerable to everyone, it is clear evident from above discussion that visitors should follow others culture and rules where they visiting is far better than other. I believe that obeying rules are more beneficial for them
It
is considered
that
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Visitors
who came from
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other
countries should obey
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local
Convention and lifestyle.
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While
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other
argue that the host County should become amicable that
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visitor
independent
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follow
their
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own
traditions. I admit that it is
obviously
debatable
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issu
. This entire
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essy
will discussion both significant views

[24/04, 12: 04 pm]
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Shihabur
Rahman:
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Visitors
should
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Follow
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local
custom and
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culture
has great number of benefits.
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Frist
and
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formost
, to respect
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other
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culture
and receive with
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good
grace their
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government
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rules
, every Foreigner
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shuld
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follow
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other
couriers customs and
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rules
,
for example
,
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many
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countries
beer, and cinema
are prohibited
.
What is more
, learning
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other
language and knowing
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behaviour
and fashion what things are trend on
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these society
,
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people
who came from overseas can
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fucus
on customs and
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behaviour
.
Furthermore
, a recent study from UNESCO reveal that more than 60% of the tourists who know about
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local
lifestyle, are more effective and less facing difficulties there.
Finally
, The More
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people
know others
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culture
and language, the more they gain experience in life, which
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help
them Their professional lifestyle.

[24/04, 12: 17 pm]
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Shihabur
Rahman: On the
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other
hand, it can not be
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ignored
that host County should
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offers
opportunity about various
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culture
and
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behaviour
. To
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begin
with, to
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improve
economic fiscal and attractive to
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visitors
through these facilities, every
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countries
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shuold
receive others
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culture
positively
.
Moreover
, by providing to tourists maintain their
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culture
and lifestyle in host County not
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only
well distinguished
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but
also
came up top preferences to
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visitors
. If
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government
and
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local
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people
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allow
to celebrate their
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own
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culture
,
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behaviour
as well
as food, they will earn more money from their.

To sum up, my thorough analysis is considerable to everyone, it is
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clear
evident from above discussion that
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visitors
should
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follow
others
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culture
and
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rules
where
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they visiting
is far better than
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other
. I believe that obeying
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rules
are more beneficial for
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them
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IELTS essay Topic. . . . vistors should follow others culture and customs, while others argue that host coutres wellcom other behaviour and culture

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
315 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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