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The table and pie chart shows the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.1

The table and pie chart shows the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.
Family is always playing the role of mediator between the society and their young one. But, the school is a place where students learn so many things about life. So, accordingly, both plays their own role in the life of a person. Lets discuss in the coming paragraphs. First and foremost, mother and father knows more about their child's life, because from their childhood, the started teaching about speaking, walking and eating. In my opinion, all the time they help their kid to tackle the situation and the up-downs of life. On the other hand, when they become young, their parents always stand by their side to tell about the society and the living. For instance, when a child started growing them always needs the support of their family and surroundings for the moral values. Secondly, Schools also have their own part in the student life. Undoubtedly, when a kid started his learning from the school, in the coming time he also learn about their social values. For instance, in student life he or she started making friends as well as sharing of things. Moreover, learn about how all of the friends care about each others. On the whole, by gaining these habits from school also helps them in making a better person of the society. To conclude, family and friends, both are taking a major part in the name of the social and moral life of the one. There is no meaning of a person, in the society with a bad behaviour. So education and upbringing both plays a great role in it.
Family is always playing the role of mediator between the society and their young one.
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is a place where students learn
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many
things about
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life
.
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,
accordingly
, both plays their
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own
role in the
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life
of a person.
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Lets
discuss in the coming paragraphs.

First
and foremost, mother and father knows more about their child's
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life
,
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because
from their childhood, the
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started
teaching about speaking, walking and eating. In my opinion, all the time they
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help
their kid to tackle the situation and the up-downs of
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life
.
On the other hand
, when they become young, their parents always stand by their side to
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tell
about the society and the living.
For instance
, when a child
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started
growing them always needs the support of their family and surroundings for the moral values.

Secondly
,
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Schools
also
have their
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own
part in the student
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life
.
Undoubtedly
, when a kid
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started
his learning from the
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school
, in the coming time he
also
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "learns", "learned", "learnt".
learn
about their social values.
For instance
, in student
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life
he or she
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started
making friends
as well
as sharing of things.
Moreover
, learn about how
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all of the
friends care about each
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others
.
On the whole
, by gaining these habits from
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school
also
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helps
them in making a better person of the society.

To conclude
, family and friends, both are taking a major part in the name of the social and moral
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life
of the one. There is no meaning of a person, in the society with a
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bad
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behaviour
.
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So
education and upbringing both plays a great role in it.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The table and pie chart shows the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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