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Should experiments be conducted on animals for the benefits of human beings? Give reasons for our answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience. v.1

Should experiments be conducted on animals for the benefits of human beings? Give reasons for our answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience. v. 1
In a developing country a growing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are now abandoning their native land and seeking work in rich countries. This is happing because of lack of vocational opportunities and insufficient salary. There are various solutions which should be implemented to tackle this situation. Firstly, the reason behind some professionals are leaving poorer countries and wanted to work in other wealthy countries, is due to lack of vocational opportunity. In other words, low background countries which are do not provide enough a number of job option, so doctors and teachers have to leave native countries and settle down in wealthy nations. For example, in Pakistan there are not any job vacancy because of that native professionals left own land and searching workforce in the USA and the UK. Secondly, left own place is also owing to the insufficient salary. As a result, in less economic countries salary become very low as, per professionals demand and considering their talent. For instance, doctors and teachers play a crucial role in our society and they are getting less wages as compared to richer countries. There are effective solutions for the problems which faces by professionals. One way to handle this is by giving various kinds of employment in any field which should be implemented by the government. The government ought to take some strict action against unemployment and provided them work placement. By doing this, it will help their own citizens with caring health and education. Another method of dealing with professionals demand on earning which would be increased as qualifications and intelligent doctors and teachers in their field. As a consequence, it will improve the local health system and advance education in developing countries. In conclusion, having a high number of job option and higher wages for professionals such as doctors and teachers. This all solutions will make poorer country more advance in medicines and the education system.
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of lack of vocational opportunities and insufficient salary. There are various solutions which should
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land and searching workforce in the USA and the UK.
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demand and considering their talent.
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wages as compared to richer countries.

There are effective solutions for the problems which faces by
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. One way to handle this is by giving various kinds of employment in any field which should
be implemented
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strict action against unemployment and provided them work placement. By doing this, it will
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help
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citizens with caring health and education. Another method of dealing with
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professionals
demand on earning which would
be increased
as qualifications and intelligent
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doctors
and
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in their field. As a consequence, it will
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improve
the local health system and advance education in
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developing countries
.

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doctors
and
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. This all solutions will
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poorer
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more advance in medicines and the education system.
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IELTS essay Should experiments be conducted on animals for the benefits of human beings? Give reasons for our answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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