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TOPIC: A tendency that the news report in the media focuses on problems and emergencies rather than the positive development is harmful to both the individual and the society. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

TOPIC: A tendency that the news report in the media focuses on problems and emergencies rather than the positive development is harmful to both the individual and the society. v. 1
Today we are exposed to extensive coverage of sensational news, containing both positive and negative headlines. People may find this tendency doing more harm than good but I doubt whether their argument bears much analysis. Accordingly, the aim of this essay is to provide evidence for my disagreement towards this statement. First and foremost, what takes my priority is the inevitable role of news reporting. In particular, for people such as news reporter or journalists, their major work is keeping the public abreast of the current issues at the meantime. The most important point here is that news coverage is unbiased and straightforward; therefore, it is nonsensical to regard the exposure of burning emergencies as threatening to the community. What is more, if it had not been for the alarming cautions from the journalism, we would be kept in the dark about the potential dangers surrounding us. Needless to say, news stations are not responsible for the adverse influence on the society. Simultaneously, there is much to be said about the prejudice of the public against journalism. Some may believe news coverage to be either exaggerating or distorting the truth. However, what they fail to take into consideration is the alternative news resources such as witnessing or networking. It is no difficult task to see whether one is telling the truth or not. Therefore, people should not blame the negative impact for the journalism occupants. All in all, workers responsible for news reporting are doing their tasks well. Therefore, I insist that this essay be taken into detailed consideration to adopt suitable guidelines.
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Today
we
are exposed
to extensive coverage of sensational
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news
, containing both
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positive
and
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negative
headlines.
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People
may find this tendency doing more harm than
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good
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but
I doubt whether their argument bears much analysis.
Accordingly
, the aim of this essay is to provide evidence for my disagreement towards this statement.

First
and foremost, what takes my priority is the inevitable role of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
reporting.
In particular
, for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
such as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
reporter or journalists, their major work is keeping the public abreast of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
issues at the meantime. The most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
point here is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
coverage
is unbiased
and straightforward;
therefore
, it is nonsensical to regard the exposure of burning emergencies as threatening to the community.
What is more
, if it had not been for the alarming cautions from the journalism, we would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in the dark about the potential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dangers
surrounding us. Needless to say,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
stations are not responsible for the adverse influence on the society.

Simultaneously
, there is much to
be said
about the prejudice of the public against journalism.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
may believe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
coverage to be either exaggerating or distorting the truth.
However
, what they fail to take into consideration is the alternative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
resources such as witnessing or networking. It is no difficult task to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
whether one is telling the truth or not.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should not blame the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact for the journalism occupants.

All in all, workers responsible for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
reporting are doing their tasks well.
Therefore
, I insist that this essay
be taken
into detailed consideration to adopt suitable guidelines.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay TOPIC: A tendency that the news report in the media focuses on problems and emergencies rather than the positive development is harmful to both the individual and the society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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