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Topic 3: Some people say that taking online classes is nowadays a new trend while other people prefer going to traditional classes.

Topic 3: Some people say that taking online classes is nowadays a new trend while other people prefer going to traditional classes. oEKPD
In contemporary, there is an increase in the trend of distance learning. Several people believed that this method had a total of positive impacts and it will alter conventional education. First and foremost, taking online classes helps pupils study more effectively. When studying online, learners will access new sources of information. They can absorb knowledge not only from their teachers but also from different sources on the Internet. On the other hand, teachers have to create lessons with a variety of creative ways, including pictures, videos, … which have greatly attracted students’ attention. Secondly, learning online considers as an easy method for teachers to manage their pupils. They can check their learners’ diligence and study results by the software. Consequently, pupils have to learn more complicated rather than join in traditional classes since their tutors can check them at any moment. In this way, teachers can estimate their students accurately. Last but not least, e-learning saves costs for both schools and students. Taking online classes, schools don’t need to establish categories, apply modern facilities and pay a salary to people who work like guards, cleaners, … Moreover, students have just had modern devices connected to the Internet, and they can study without travelling and paying money for services having at school. In conclusion, we can’t deny the benefits that online classes bring to us are enormously helpful. Hopefully, traditional classes will be replaced by online courses as it’s accessible for almost students and schools.
In contemporary, there is an increase in the trend of distance learning. Several
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people
believed that this method had a total of
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positive
impacts and it will alter conventional education.

First
and foremost, taking
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online
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classes
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helps
pupils study more
effectively
. When studying
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online
, learners will access new sources of information. They can absorb knowledge not
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only
from their
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teachers
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but
also
from
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different
sources on the Internet.
On the other hand
,
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teachers
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have to
create lessons with a variety of creative ways, including pictures, videos, … which have
greatly
attracted
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students’
attention.

Secondly
, learning
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online
considers as an easy method for
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teachers
to manage their pupils. They can
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check
their learners’ diligence and study results by the software.
Consequently
, pupils
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have to
learn more complicated
rather
than
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join
in traditional
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classes
since their tutors can
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check
them at any moment. In this way,
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teachers
can estimate their
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students
accurately
.

Last
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but
not least, e-learning saves costs for both schools and
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students
. Taking
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online
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classes
, schools don’t need to establish categories, apply modern facilities and pay a salary to
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people
who work like guards, cleaners, …
Moreover
,
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students
have
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just
had modern devices connected to the Internet, and they can study without travelling and paying money for services having at school.

In conclusion
, we can’t deny the benefits that
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online
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classes
bring to us are
enormously
helpful.
Hopefully
, traditional
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classes
will
be replaced
by
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online
courses as
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it’s
accessible for almost
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students
and schools.
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IELTS essay Topic 3: Some people say that taking online classes is nowadays a new trend while other people prefer going to traditional classes.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
244 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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