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Topic 15: Many Vietnamese people say that “To make the economy truly integrate with other countries in the world, we should remove the Lunar New Year and celebrate the Solar New Year.”

Topic 15: Many Vietnamese people say that “To make the economy truly integrate with other countries in the world, we should remove the Lunar New Year and celebrate the Solar New Year. ” GNKdm
It is undeniable that Lunar New Year called Tet has considered as the biggest traditional festival that can bring people together so as to celebrate a sacred and meaningful annual event. However, in recent times, many Vietnamese people have the idea of removing Tet and celebrate the Solar New Year due to the integration with the world economy. From my point of view, I totally antagonize with this statement. To begin with, organizing the Solar New Year can be the reason that will eliminate Vietnamese customs. It is a fact that the Tet holiday is one of the most long-established festivals in Viet Nam which is an occasion when members of a family get together, pay their honour to their ancestors and pray for luck in the new year. Removing this customary event and celebrating the Solar New Year means eradicating all of Vietnamese cultures and traditions. Vietnamese citizens will resign their manners and have to approach other new cultures. Therefore, Vietnamese people’s culture and tradition will be assimilated with other countries and won’t have their own identity. Another reason is that basing on the Gregorian calendar to organize the Solar New Year can be unreasonable for people’s living habits. According to Vietnam’s history, our Vietnamese citizens are original rice farmers. Like other countries in Asia, their lives had to be connected closely with lunar calendar. In other words, the lunar calendar has been regarded as a significant role in Vietnamese persons’ life. They will tend to be hard-working continually almost days a year and then enjoying holidays and festivals that have been held based on lunar calendar, especially the Tet holiday – an extended vacation. Removing this will turn upside down people’s life considerably. In conclusion, there can be no argument that the Lunar New Year is playing a crucial part in Vietnamese people’s culture and tradition. Tet holiday marked our identity, and it represented our nation’s soul. It can’t be replaced by the Solar New Year for the purpose of integrating other worldwide countries’ economies.
It is undeniable that
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called Tet has considered as the biggest traditional festival that can bring
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people
together
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so as to
celebrate a sacred and meaningful annual
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event
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However
, in recent times,
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many
Vietnamese
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people
have the
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idea
of removing Tet and celebrate the
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Solar
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New
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Year
due to the integration with the world economy. From my point of view, I
totally
antagonize with this statement.

To
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begin
with, organizing the
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Solar
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New
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Year
can be the reason that will eliminate Vietnamese customs. It is a fact that the Tet
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holiday
is one of the most long-established festivals in
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Nam which is an occasion when members of a family
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get
together, pay their
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honour
to their ancestors and pray for luck in the
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new
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year
. Removing this customary
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event
and celebrating the
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Solar
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New
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Year
means eradicating all of Vietnamese
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cultures
and traditions. Vietnamese citizens will resign their manners and
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have to
approach
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other
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new
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cultures
.
Therefore
, Vietnamese
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people’s
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culture
and tradition will
be assimilated
with
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other
countries and won’t have their
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own
identity.

Another reason is that basing on the Gregorian
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calendar
to organize the
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Solar
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New
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Year
can be unreasonable for
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people’s
living habits. According to Vietnam’s history, our Vietnamese citizens are original rice farmers. Like
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other
countries in Asia, their
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lives
had to
be connected
closely
with
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lunar
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calendar
. In
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other
words, the
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lunar
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calendar
has
been regarded
as a significant role in Vietnamese persons’ life. They will tend to be
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hard
-working
continually
almost days a
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year
and then enjoying
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holidays
and festivals that have
been held
based on
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lunar
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calendar
,
especially
the Tet
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holiday
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–
an extended vacation. Removing this will turn upside down
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people’s
life
considerably
.

In conclusion
, there can be no argument that the
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Lunar
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Year
is playing a crucial part in Vietnamese
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people’s
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culture
and tradition. Tet
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holiday
marked our identity, and it represented our nation’s soul. It can’t
be replaced
by the
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Solar
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New
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Year
for the purpose of integrating
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other
worldwide countries’ economies.
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IELTS essay Topic 15: Many Vietnamese people say that “To make the economy truly integrate with other countries in the world, we should remove the Lunar New Year and celebrate the Solar New Year. ”

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