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Topic 10: Should are subjects be optional at school?

Topic 10: Should are subjects be optional at school? yPp5g
School curriculum plays a significant role in improving students’ abilities and advancing their intellect. Some people believed that the curriculum including a wide range of compulsory subjects is reasonable for pupils. However, from my point of view, subjects should be optional at school. First and foremost, children may reduce stress and pressure when having an opportunity to choose what subjects to learn. They mustn’t take a wide range of exams for different subjects. Moreover, because of the minor issues they have to study, they won’t need to spend too much time reviewing and covering a large amount of knowledge before the exams. Children will have free time to entertain themselves by doing exercises, playing games, listening to music and other fascinating activities. Secondly, optional subjects at school can help students considerably advance their potential. Pupils will have the right to opt for the subjects they really want to absorb knowledge and improve. When studying according to their intent, they will have the motivation to complete it well rather than take compulsory subjects. Undoubtedly, reducing unnecessary subjects for students has created a suitable environment for learners to focus on and train their optional subjects greatly so as to improve themselves better. Last but not least, subjects should be optional at school to assist the teachers in appreciating pupils accurately. Almost all learners will have difficulty in acquiring knowledge in some academic subjects that are not related to their wish. Therefore, optional subjects will be the best choice for them since they can master subjects they have strength in instead of studying a wide range of subjects. Consequently, teachers will find their real talents at own aspects of subjects, and their appreciation will be exact. In conclusion, although absorbing knowledge in a large number of subjects is significant for students, subjects should be optional at school because of the benefits that it has brought about. Hopefully, this method of learning will widely apply in almost all schools in our country.
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curriculum plays a significant role in improving
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students’
abilities and advancing their intellect.
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Some
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people
believed that the curriculum including a wide range of compulsory
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subjects
is reasonable for pupils.
However
, from my point of view,
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subjects
should be optional at school.

First
and foremost, children may
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reduce
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stress
and pressure when having an opportunity to choose what
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subjects
to learn. They mustn’t take a wide range of exams for
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different
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subjects
.
Moreover
,
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because
of the minor issues they
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have to
study, they won’t need to spend too much time reviewing and covering a large amount of
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knowledge
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before
the exams. Children will have free time to entertain themselves by doing exercises, playing games, listening to music and other fascinating activities.

Secondly
, optional
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subjects
at
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school
can
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help
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students
considerably
advance their potential. Pupils will have the right to opt for the
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subjects
they
really
want to absorb
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knowledge
and
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improve
. When studying according to their intent, they will have the motivation to complete it well
rather
than take compulsory
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subjects
.
Undoubtedly
, reducing unnecessary
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subjects
for
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students
has created a suitable environment for learners to focus on and train their optional
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subjects
greatly
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so as to
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improve
themselves better.

Last
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but
not least,
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subjects
should be optional at
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school
to assist the teachers in appreciating pupils
accurately
. Almost all learners will have difficulty in acquiring
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knowledge
in
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some
academic
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subjects
that are not related to their wish.
Therefore
, optional
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subjects
will be the best choice for them since they can master
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subjects
they have strength in
instead
of studying a wide range of
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subjects
.
Consequently
, teachers will find their real talents at
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own
aspects of
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subjects
, and their appreciation will be exact.

In conclusion
, although absorbing
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knowledge
in
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a large number of
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subjects
is significant for
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students
,
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subjects
should be optional at
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school
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because
of the benefits that it has brought about.
Hopefully
, this method of learning will
widely
apply in almost all
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schools
in our country.
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IELTS essay Topic 10: Should are subjects be optional at school?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
328 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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