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Topic 1: The importance of IT in modern life.

Topic 1: The importance of IT in modern life. 95dA7
The successful development of information technology has dramatically changed our world to create a more modern life for humans to live. Modern technology has brought about at least three positive effects on our life. First of all, it’s an enormous source of information. A tremendous amount of knowledge about all fields in life, news from all the countries, and other sinformation are provided to people by modern technology. Thanks to it, humans can gain these to broaden their mind and know more about the world from reading newspapers online, access the website and other media information channels. It’s a big step for people to expand their knowledge about the world and improve themselves well. Secondly, information technology improves the standard of living. It’s a type of entertainment. People can use technology to play games, watch videso, listen to music, access some useful applications like Facebook, Zalo, Instagram, … to contact other people, up status, express thoughts, reduce stress after working a long day. Moreover, it is easily connected with furniture items at home like air-conditioning, smart TV and other intelligent devices. It may help humans feel comfortable and satisfied with the services in their own house. Last but not least, modern technology has increased productivity. Schools need the Internet connection to apply modern facilities at classes to teach effectively. Teachers can use IT to create tasks so that they could have exciting lessons in the course. Students could use IT to do assignments, take exams, study online, …On the other hand, information technology has helped industries have a large scale of manufacture. Instead of outdated manual production, modern technology allows us to manufacture with huge goods while still ensuring quality. In a nutshell, our modern life will tremendously change with the help of information technology. Hopefully, technology will still maintain the value that it has brought to us and will develop more strongly as it plays an integral part in our life.
The successful development of
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dramatically
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changed
our world to create a more
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modern
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life
for humans to
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live
.
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technology
has brought about at least three
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positive
effects on our life.

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First of all
, it’s an enormous source of
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information
. A tremendous amount of knowledge about all fields in
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life
, news from all the countries, and
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other sinformation
are provided
to
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people
by
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modern
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technology
. Thanks to it, humans can gain these to broaden their mind and know more about the world from reading newspapers online, access the website and
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other
media
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information
channels. It’s a
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big
step for
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people
to expand their knowledge about the world and
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improve
themselves well.

Secondly
,
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information
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technology
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improves
the standard of living. It’s a type of entertainment.
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People
can
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use
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technology
to play games,
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watch
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videso
, listen to music, access
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some
useful applications like Facebook,
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Zalo
, Instagram, … to contact
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other
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people
, up status, express thoughts,
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reduce
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stress
after working a long day.
Moreover
, it is
easily
connected with furniture items at home like air-conditioning, smart TV and
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other
intelligent devices. It may
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help
humans feel comfortable and satisfied with the services in their
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own
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house
.

Last
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but
not least,
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modern
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technology
has increased productivity. Schools need the Internet connection to apply
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modern
facilities at classes to teach
effectively
. Teachers can
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use
IT to create tasks
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so
that they could have exciting lessons in the course. Students could
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use
IT to do assignments, take exams, study online, …
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On
the
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hand,
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information
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technology
has
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helped
industries have a large scale of manufacture.
Instead
of outdated manual production,
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modern
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technology
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allows
us to manufacture with huge
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goods
while
still
ensuring quality.

In a nutshell, our
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modern
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life
will
tremendously
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change
with the
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help
of
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information
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technology
.
Hopefully
,
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technology
will
still
maintain the value that it has brought to us and will develop more
strongly
as it plays an integral part in our
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life
.
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IELTS essay Topic 1: The importance of IT in modern life.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
322 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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