Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Topic 1: Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways.

Topic 1: Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways. J826
While international car-free days are thought to effectively reduce the level of air pollution, some other people believe there are alternatives that are also effective. I will discuss both of these views in my essay below. On the one hand, it is true that exhaust fumes from cars are majorly responsible for polluting the air as they contain a relatively high proportion of pollutants such as CO2. By having some days without cars on the road, no harmful smoke will be released into the atmosphere, and this will therefore improve air quality. This policy is extremely effective in big cities around the world. Take Beijing, the city known for its dirty air and its atmosphere covered with smog, for example. Since this car-free policy was strictly operated, the air quality of the city has greatly improved. On the other hand, local governments should encourage the use of public tranport like subways because it produces a smaller quantity of pollutants and is less likely to damage the air. Also, the disposal of waste, especially plastic waste that emits toxic fumes if burned carelessly, at landfills should be closely monitored. The final and the most effective way is to use sustainable and environmentally energy sources, for example solar or wind power, to replace fossil fuels in the long term. In my view, those measures are all effective in addressing the problem of air pollution, but only to a certain extent. Such a problem needs to be dealt with by different approaches and I always feel that if there is only one way being implemented, it will not be enough.
While international car-free days are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to
effectively
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the level of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
pollution,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe there are alternatives that are
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
effective
. I will discuss both of these views in my essay below.

On the one hand, it is true that exhaust fumes from cars are
majorly
responsible for polluting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
as they contain a
relatively
high proportion of pollutants such as CO2. By having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
days without cars on the road, no harmful smoke will
be released
into the atmosphere, and this will
therefore
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
quality. This policy is
extremely
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
effective
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
cities around the world. Take Beijing, the city known for its dirty
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
and its atmosphere covered with smog,
for example
. Since this car-free policy was
strictly
operated, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
quality of the city has
greatly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.

On the other hand
, local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should encourage the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public
Possible spelling mistake found.
tranport
like subways
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it produces a smaller quantity of pollutants and is less likely to damage the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
.
Also
, the disposal of waste,
especially
plastic waste that emits toxic fumes if burned
carelessly
, at landfills should be
closely
monitored. The final and the most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
effective
way is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
sustainable and
environmentally
energy sources,
for example
solar or wind power, to replace fossil fuels in the long term.

In my view, those measures are all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
effective
in addressing the problem of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
pollution,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to a certain extent. Such a problem needs to
be dealt
with by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
approaches and I always feel that if there is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one way
being implemented
, it will not be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
.

IELTS essay Topic 1: Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Topic 1: Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution; however, others think there are some other ways.