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too many choices, good or bad?

too many choices, good or bad? AwabL
Choosing has been a real predicament for overpassing millennia. In the recent climate, there is a widely held view among many individuals, including myself, that too many choices have made people confused and have dramatically increased the rate of consumerism in various societies. To begin with, when there are plenty of choices, it is very obstinate to single out just one of them. Something that really has made people feel confused. They are not able to select as easily as when there were fewer choices. An example could be the process of buying a new smartphone. Nowadays, different kinds of mobile phones are available which most of them are cutting-edge and beneficial. Consecutively, a person could not choose which one is more useful. Not only could having numerous choices confuse people but also sometimes are futile. Secondly and more importantly, surging the number of choices leads to consumerism. Factories plus industries have been producing various kinds of goods which pursue spirits to buy them, whether they need them or not. Take, as a case in point, the flamboyant shopping centers. When persons enter them, they could not select between all those items. Costumers, therefore, have to buy more than their requirements which causes the staggering rate of consumerism. So, too many choices distract people and urge them to shop more and more. From what has been discussed, and in order to draw a conclusion, lots of choices lead to feeling confused, moreover, increased consumerism. That is why many do not accept this issue.
Choosing has been a real predicament for overpassing millennia. In the recent climate, there is a
widely
held view among
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many
individuals, including myself, that too
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many
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choices
have made
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people
confused and have
dramatically
increased the rate of consumerism in various societies. To
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begin
with, when there are
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plenty
of
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choices
, it is
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very
obstinate to single out
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just
one of them. Something that
really
has made
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people
feel confused. They are not able to select as
easily
as when there were fewer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
. An example could be the process of buying a new smartphone. Nowadays,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kinds of mobile phones are available which most of them are cutting-edge and beneficial.
Consecutively
, a person could not choose which one is more useful. Not
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only
could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "have"
having
numerous
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choices
confuse
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people
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but
also
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sometimes
are futile.
Secondly
and more
importantly
, surging the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
leads to consumerism. Factories plus industries have been producing various kinds of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
which pursue spirits to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
them, whether they need them or not. Take, as a case in point, the flamboyant shopping centers. When persons enter them, they could not select between all those items. Costumers,
therefore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
more than their requirements which causes the staggering rate of consumerism.
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So
, too
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
distract
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and urge them to shop more and more. From what has
been discussed
, and in order to draw a conclusion, lots of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
lead to feeling confused,
moreover
, increased consumerism.
That is
why
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many
do not accept this issue.
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IELTS essay too many choices, good or bad?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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