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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - The man expresses his opinion about the university’s plan. State his opinion and explain the reason he gives for holding that opinion. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - The man expresses his opinion about the university’s plan. State his opinion and explain the reason he gives for holding that opinion. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1
It is true that man and woman need to work in full time in many countries. That is to say that, irregardless of the gender, they should share in household duties. In my own opinion, I fully agree on this for the following reasons. Firstly, men and women should share responsibilities at home because it will diminish the stress in the family. When people share tasks, there will likewise be less arguments or conflicts. For instance, both human beings and women can divide the household chores in the morning and evening in order to finish the tasks accordingly. Moreover, working together in household works can break the traditional gender stereotypes. Rather than men go to work, while the women clean the house, they can both do the same. For example, in a married couple setting, when the wife is the one who gets to the office, it should then be the husband who does the household chores and vice versa, so that the one will not be exhausted in doing the all-around full time work. Finally, sharing household duties can lessen the work overload. A fair share of tasks can prevent one from too much working than the usual that can risk its health from getting fatigued and injuries. It is necessary that family members should assist in balancing the tasks at home. In conclusion, men and women should have an equal share of obligations. I believe that by sharing workloads they will be able to decrease their stress and improve their physical wellness.
It is true that
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man
and woman need to
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work
in full time in
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many
countries.
That is
to say that,
'Irregardless' is acceptable in casual and nonstandard writing at best. In formal style you should use "regardless".
irregardless
of the gender, they should
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share
in
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household
duties. In my
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own
opinion, I
fully
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agree
on this for the following reasons.

Firstly
,
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men
and
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women
should
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share
responsibilities at home
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because
it will diminish the
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stress
in the family. When
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people
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share
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tasks
, there will
likewise
be
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less
arguments or conflicts.
For instance
, both human beings and
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women
can divide the
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household
chores in the morning and evening in order to finish the
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tasks
accordingly
.

Moreover
, working together in
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household
works can break the traditional gender stereotypes.
Rather
than
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men
go to
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work
, while the
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women
clean the
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house
, they can both do the same.
For example
, in a married couple setting, when the wife is the one who
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gets
to the office, it should then be the husband who does the
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household
chores and vice versa,
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so
that the one will not
be exhausted
in doing the all-around full time work.

Finally
, sharing
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household
duties can lessen the
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work
overload. A
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fair
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share
of
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tasks
can
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prevent
one from too much
Use "worker" to make a comparison with this adjective.
working
than the usual that can
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risk
its health from getting fatigued and injuries. It is necessary that family members should assist in balancing the
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tasks
at home.

In conclusion
,
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men
and
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women
should have an equal
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share
of obligations. I believe that by sharing workloads they will be able to decrease their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and
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improve
their physical wellness.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - The man expresses his opinion about the university’s plan. State his opinion and explain the reason he gives for holding that opinion. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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