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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. 6qAx
Nowadays, some people believe that consumers buy products impulsively by just looking at the advertisements of the products in newspapers and televisions instead of their need to buy the goods. Are you opined that, sometimes people get attracted at those advertisements and they purchase the things. It is indeed a fact that there are various companies that take the help of various promotional methods to sell their products in the market. People generally buy the products without any consideration from looking the products and television or on the streets as they show the products more glamorous and are of good quality. Moreover, sometimes products are not the real need of the society but they purchased them because of the advertisements about the products. For instance, many organisations take the help of various film stars and singers to promote their products and folks by them because their favourite singer promote the product. On the other hand, it is the personal choice of the people whether to buy the products or not. Additionally people who are wealthy purchase the goods because of the brands at the quality of the products. Consequently, some people are more aware and they buy the things only when they need them. In conclusion, it depends upon the society to take the decision of buying the products. However, I tend to believe that these promotional strategies attract the people of the society in order to purchase the things. Therefore, companies on more profit.
Nowadays,
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believe that consumers
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buy
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products
impulsively
by
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just
looking at the advertisements of the
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products
in newspapers and televisions
instead
of their need to
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buy
the
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goods
. Are you opined that,
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sometimes
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people
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get
attracted at those
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advertisements and
they
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purchase
the things.

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indeed
a fact that there are various
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companies
that take the
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help
of various promotional methods to sell their
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products
in the market.
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People
generally
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buy
the
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products
without any consideration from looking the
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products
and television or on the streets as they
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show
the
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products
more glamorous and are of
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good
quality.
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,
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sometimes
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products
are not the real need of the society
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they
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purchased
them
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because
of the advertisements about the
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products
.
For instance
,
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many
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organisations
take the
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help
of various film stars and singers to promote their
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products
and folks by them
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because
their
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favourite
singer promote the product.

On the other hand
, it is the personal choice of the
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people
whether to
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buy
the
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products
or not.
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Additionally
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people
who are wealthy
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purchase
the
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goods
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because
of the brands at the quality of the
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products
.
Consequently
,
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some
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people
are more
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aware and
they
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buy
the things
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only
when they need them.

In conclusion
, it depends upon the society to take the decision of buying the
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products
.
However
, I tend to believe that these promotional strategies attract the
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people
of the society in order to
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purchase
the things.
Therefore
,
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companies
on more profit.
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IELTS essay Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

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