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some people think that internet has brought people closer together, while others think that people and communities have become more isolated. discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

some people think that internet has brought people closer together, while others think that people and communities have become more isolated. v. 1 7kxX
Nowadays, the internet plays a vital role in communication, and a number of people suggest that the internet makes the relationship closer, whereas others suggest that the internet is just making people be isolated. Internet is extremely useful to maintain relationships with family and friends who were staying in two different places. Due to technological advancement, Currently, people can video call another person and share their happiness. For instance, during any special occasion like marriage functions, birthday parties, and festivals, People can video or audio call their loved ones and celebrate the festivals. Yet, the internet is useful to communicate with other people when necessary. On the other hand, a number of people are getting addicted to the online communication with the stranger in social media and are slowly isolating themself with their loved ones. Sometimes, Strangers creating fake accounts and cheating people's money, and break up their relationship. Children who were addicted to online communications, cannot fully concentrate on their academics, and start to hide their problems with their parents and be isolated. As a result, people get stress and backward from their achievements. For instance, people can found out sensational news of online cheating cases in newspapers and television. In conclusion, online communication has both beneficiaries and effects. In my opinion, Always utilize internet communication with our family and friends and also try to avoid an interpersonal relationship with the unknown person.
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communication
, and a number of
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people
suggest that the internet
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makes
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relationship
closer, whereas others suggest that the internet is
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just
making
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people
be isolated
. Internet is
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useful to maintain
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relationships
with family and friends who were staying in two
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different
places. Due to technological advancement,
Currently
,
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people
can video call another person and share their happiness.
For instance
, during any special occasion like marriage functions, birthday parties, and festivals,
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People
can video or audio call their
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loved
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ones
and celebrate the festivals.
Yet
, the internet is useful to communicate with other
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people
when necessary.
On the other hand
, a number of
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people
are getting addicted to the
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online
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communication
with the stranger in social media and are
slowly
isolating
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themself
with their
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loved
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ones
.
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Sometimes
, Strangers creating fake accounts and cheating
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people
's money, and break up their
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relationship
. Children who
were addicted
to
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online
communications, cannot
fully
concentrate on their academics, and
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start
to
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hide
their problems with their parents and
be isolated
.
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,
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people
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get
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stress
and backward from their achievements.
For instance
,
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people
can
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found
out sensational news of
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online
cheating cases in newspapers and television.
In conclusion
,
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online
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communication
has both beneficiaries and effects. In my opinion, Always utilize internet
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communication
with our family and friends and
also
try to avoid an interpersonal
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relationship
with the unknown person.
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IELTS essay some people think that internet has brought people closer together, while others think that people and communities have become more isolated. v. 1

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234 words
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