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Today, the high of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Today, the high of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 1
The quality of a product is declining. These days products are not satisfying the user requirement like the way they are being popularized by marketing works. This essay will discuss why famous consumer goods are extremely not fulfilling the needs of the people. Firstly, the popularity of a product is so high that most of the people get trapped and buy a product, but at the end, when a product does not give the desired result, people get disappointed. Advertisements have been done on a Television quite often by a movie star that many people consider buying a product. For example, the product which is at a high sale, its advertisements have been done most by some big stars. Therefore, people are being fooled by showing lots of advertisements for the product. Secondly, the way a product should respond positively, it is reflecting a negative result. Since most of the money is spent on advertisements and when they left with a less amount of fundings, products are contaminated and their quality is compromised. For example, a hair-loss reduction oil which was made in an Asian country showed a side effect, its user got ill and when the company owner was asked questions on that, he replied, he got left no money after the advertisement. Hence, it shows that advertisements are reflecting more than the quality of a product. In conclusion, Advertisements have been the only focus instead of making a better quality product. Although people are buying some goods in the name of their popularity, in result they are getting nothing good. So, this essay discussed why people are not being provided with what they need; they are really being deceived by the marketing work.
The
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quality
of a
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product
is declining. These days
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products
are not satisfying the user requirement like the way they are
being popularized
by marketing works. This essay will discuss why
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famous
consumer
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goods
are
extremely
not fulfilling the needs of the
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people
.

Firstly
, the popularity of a
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product
is
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so
high that most of the
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people
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get
trapped and
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buy
a
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product
,
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but
at the
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end
, when a
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product
does not give the desired result,
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people
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get
disappointed.
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Advertisements
have
been done
on a Television quite
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often
by a movie star that
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many
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people
consider buying a
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product
.
For example
, the
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product
which is at a high sale, its
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advertisements
have
been done
most by
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some
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big
stars.
Therefore
,
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people
are
being fooled
by showing lots of
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advertisements
for the product.

Secondly
, the way a
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product
should respond
positively
, it is reflecting a
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negative
result. Since most of the money
is spent
on
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advertisements
and when they
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left
with a less amount of
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fundings
,
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products
are contaminated
and their
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quality
is compromised
.
For example
, a hair-loss reduction oil which
was made
in an Asian country
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showed
a side effect, its user
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got
ill and when the
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company
owner
was asked
questions on that, he replied, he
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got
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left
no money after the
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advertisement
.
Hence
, it
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shows
that
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advertisements
are reflecting more than the
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quality
of a product.

In conclusion
,
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Advertisements
have been the
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only
focus
instead
of making a better
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quality
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product
. Although
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people
are buying
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some
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goods
in the name of their popularity, in result they are getting nothing
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good
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, this essay discussed why
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people
are not
being provided
with what they need; they are
really
being deceived
by the marketing work.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Today, the high of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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