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Today, people can work and live in anywhere they want, because of the improvement of communication technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

Today, people can work and live in anywhere they want, because of the improvement of communication technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages. oqpB
Globalisation has made it possible for people to live and work anywhere in the world. This has become possible only due to the advancement of communication technology and transport. Although there are advantages for this, the ramifications cannot be ignored. This essay will discuss both the pros and cons of this issue. There are innumerable advantages of working abroad. To begin with, when people more from underdeveloped countries to developed ones they get better pay and this improves their lifestyle. For example, many Indians working overseas has not only improved their lifestyle, but also has helped their families back home. Moreover, living in another country than their own country. For instance, many Pakistani families settled in the UK, find it safe there as the crime rate is more in their own country. Clearly, these benefits have enhanced the quality of life with much ease and convenience. However, there are some drawbacks associated with living and working in another country. Firstly, these people get disconnected from their culture and other family members. As many children of Indian families are unaware of their own native language. In addition to this, the advancement of communication is unable to bridge the gap between many couples due to which the divorce rates are going up. According to a recent survey, divorce rates has increased to about 20% as compared to 2000. Overall, these pitfalls are minor and can be ignored. In conclusion, even though the trend of working abroad has some downsides, it is eclipsed by the advantages and has been proved to be very successful for many families.
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Globalisation
has made it possible for
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people
to
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and work anywhere in the world. This has become possible
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due to the advancement of communication technology and transport. Although there are advantages for this, the ramifications cannot be
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ignored
. This essay will discuss both the pros and cons of this issue.

There are innumerable advantages of
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working
abroad. To
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begin
with, when
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people
more from underdeveloped
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countries
to developed ones they
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get
better pay and this
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improves
their lifestyle.
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Indians
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working
overseas has not
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only
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improved
their lifestyle,
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also
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helped
their
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families
back home.
Moreover
, living in another
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country
than their
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own
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country
.
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,
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many
Pakistani
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families
settled in the UK, find it safe there as the crime rate is more in their
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own
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country
.
Clearly
, these benefits have enhanced the quality of life with much
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ease
and convenience.

However
, there are
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drawbacks associated with living and
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in another
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.
Firstly
, these
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disconnected from their culture and other
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members.
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children of Indian
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are unaware of their
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own
native language.
In addition
to this, the advancement of communication is unable to bridge the gap between
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many
couples due to which the divorce rates are going up. According to a recent survey, divorce rates has increased to about 20% as compared to 2000.
Overall
, these pitfalls are minor and can be
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ignored
.

In conclusion
,
even though
the trend of
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downsides, it
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been proved
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very
successful for
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IELTS essay Today, people can work and live in anywhere they want, because of the improvement of communication technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
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