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Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. KeoL
Children are the backbone and future of a nation. It is an undeniable fact art is an essential element of education. A number of individuals believe that it should be mandatory for all the pupils to study art in their curriculum as it assists them to learn new things easily. I think this is a conservative statement to make. I will discuss my views in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, there are a plethora of contributing factors that support my view. First and foremost, in the modern era, children have a lot of pressure of their field subjects. Meanwhile, it will be an extra burden for them to study one more subject. For instance, nowadays pupils prefer to take dummy admissions after matriculation and prepare for the competitive exams at the coaching centres. Even in regular classes, they have to focus more on their technical subjects rather than other subjects. Secondly, as their curriculum is designed by highly qualified professionals so teaching an extra subject will not be a good step. On the other hand, many people assert that studying art has an enormous benefit for students. It rejuvenates their mind and acts as a catalyst for their concentration. In addition to this, they feel more energetic and use their creativity to curb their problems. But every student does not have same kind of interest to perform an activity. The outcomes might be better for some pupils but others feel frustrated as they don’t have any keen interest to perform such activities. To recapitulate, I would like to reiterate that although art plays an important role in the growth and development of students yet it should not be compulsory for them.
Children are the backbone and future of a nation. It is an undeniable fact
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art
is an essential element of education. A number of individuals believe that it should be mandatory for all the pupils to study
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
in their curriculum as it assists them to learn new things
easily
. I
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think
this is a conservative statement to
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make
. I will discuss my views in the upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, there are a plethora of contributing factors that support my view.
First
and foremost, in the modern era, children have
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a lot of
pressure of their field
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subjects
. Meanwhile, it will be an extra burden for them to study one more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
.
For instance
, nowadays pupils prefer to take dummy admissions after matriculation and prepare for the competitive exams at the coaching
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centres
. Even in regular classes, they
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have to
focus more on their technical
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subjects
rather
than other subjects.

Secondly
, as their curriculum
is designed
by
highly
qualified professionals
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so
teaching an extra
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subject
will not be a
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good
step.

On the other hand
,
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many
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people
assert that studying
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art
has an enormous benefit for students. It rejuvenates their mind and acts as a catalyst for their concentration.
In addition
to this, they feel more energetic and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their creativity to curb their problems.
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But
every student does not have same kind of interest to perform an activity. The outcomes might be better for
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some
pupils
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but
others feel frustrated as they don’t have any keen interest to perform such activities.

To recapitulate, I would like to reiterate that although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
plays an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in the growth and development of students
yet
it should not be compulsory for them.

IELTS essay Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
6.0
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