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Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v.1

Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 1
These days people are touring more than they did in the past. The primary reason for this is cheap flight rates and the main advantage they get by travelling is relaxation from the chores. Nowadays, the public are showing more interest in visiting places because of the reduced prices of flights. That is to say, Airbus companies come up with regular deals and discounts for tourist locations and also provide free accommodation with meals at their motels. As a result, more people will be motivated to travel because they had to spend very little on expenses incurred during the travel. For example, British Airways offers cheap packages to certain destinations such as the UK and Bali, every year during the Christmas season resulting in 20% increase in the rush at airports. The main benefit people get is leisure and relaxation from performing their daily routine. In other words, they often go through tremendous stress at work to meet the deadlines and they get motivated to take time off to travel. They utilise these break days to visit their families and places of interest by which they revive and feel refreshed. For instance, last year we went to my mother's village located in the outskirts of the city to spend our quality time in meeting family members and enjoying the nature to energise ourselves from the routine activities. To conclude, more people are travelling today because of the less cost of flying and the primary advantage people get is fun and relaxation from regular life. It is predicted that there will be 40% more travellers by the end of 2020.
These days
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people
are touring more than they did in the past. The primary reason for this is
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cheap
flight rates and the main advantage they
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get
by travelling is relaxation from the chores.

Nowadays, the public are showing more interest in visiting places
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because
of the
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reduced
prices of flights.
That is
to say, Airbus
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companies
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come
up with regular deals and discounts for tourist locations and
also
provide free accommodation with meals at their motels.
As a result
, more
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people
will
be motivated
to travel
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because
they had to spend
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very
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little
on expenses incurred during the travel.
For example
, British Airways offers
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cheap
packages to certain destinations such as the UK and Bali, every year during the Christmas season resulting in 20% increase in the rush at airports.

The main benefit
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people
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get
is leisure and relaxation from performing their daily routine.
In other words
, they
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often
go through tremendous
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stress
at work to
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meet
the
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deadlines and
they
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get
motivated to take time off to travel.

They
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utilise
these break days to visit their families and places of
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interest by
which they revive and feel refreshed.
For instance
, last year we went to my mother's village located in the outskirts of the city to spend our quality time in meeting family members and enjoying the nature to
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energise
ourselves from the routine activities.

To conclude
, more
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people
are travelling
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today
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because
of the less cost of flying and the primary advantage
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people
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get
is fun and relaxation from regular life. It
is predicted
that there will be 40% more
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travellers
by the
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end
of 2020.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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