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Today most people are choosing to live alone or with friends. It can effect badly to society. What extend do you agree or disagree?

Today most people are choosing to live alone or with friends. It can effect badly to society. What extend Bwdbj
Today may people prefer to live with mates or lonely than with their families. It may cause to have a negative effect on society. In my opinion most people live together with their families and according to current figures, this is not so dangerous. However, provided that, they increase, it will have a bad impact on society. Initially, one obvious reason for living with family is at the expense of economic problems. Most people do not know how to manage their budget without their elder family members or some of them do not work, even they are able to make enough money to whole family members. Moreover, Family members may support other members whenever they want money without any conditions or rules. People who live separately can purchase their money what they want, but in most cases it cause to waste of money. Overall, people are more likely to live with families due to economic support and lack of knowledge about spending budget. To think about living alone or with friends, it is true that it may have detrimental effects on society. For instance, one thing to bear in mind is that, while living with fellows, it may cause to disappearing of relationships with loved ones. It is known from European or American countries, people leave their parents alone when they are old. In the future It may lead to decrease of being respectful for old aged people, if people continue doing it like these. Furthermore, when people live alone, they feel themselves depressed or even needless. In that case, it leads people to rare illnesses or mental deseases. All in all, people lose relationships with their families and contract illness. To conclude, people who prefer to live alone or with friends are twice or third less than who live with family and i think it will not change in a bad way. Otherwise, it can impact on society badly in the future.
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impact on society.

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, one obvious reason for living with
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is at the expense of economic problems. Most
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people
do not know how to manage their budget without their elder
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family
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in most cases
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Overall
,
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with
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due to economic support and lack of knowledge about spending budget.

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about living
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or with friends, it is true that it may have detrimental effects on society.
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leave
their parents
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when they are
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, they feel themselves depressed or even needless.
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, it leads
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to rare illnesses or mental
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deseases
. All in all,
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people
lose relationships with their
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families
and contract illness.

To conclude
,
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people
who prefer to
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alone
or with friends are twice or third less than who
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with
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and
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i
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it will not
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way.
Otherwise
, it can impact on society
badly
in the future.
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IELTS essay Today most people are choosing to live alone or with friends. It can effect badly to society. What extend

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