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Art galleries and museums preserve important artifacts of history hence they have historical significance. Some people opine that entry to the museums should be free. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Art galleries and museums preserve important artifacts of history hence they have historical significance. Some people opine that entry to the museums should be free. YwxjV
Artifacts and ancient texts, which are showcased in museums reflect the rich history behind our successful civilization. Some individuals contemplate that they should be allowed entry in museums without any charges. I strongly agree that people should be allowed in museums free of cost as it will generate more visitors and also the taxpayer will feel benefitted. To begin with, making entry free in museums will attract more visitors to the place. Tourists will have exposure to our ancient culture and they will become more aware about the history of an old era. If the entry in museums becomes free, then it will become heaven for the students, who are extremely enthusiastic about history and archeology. For instance/to exemplify/for example, there is a museum in the small town of Dharampur in the state of Gujarat, where the entry in the museum is completely free and it has been very successful in attracting more visitors who are quite enthusiastic about history and culture. Furthermore, every citizen of the country pays taxes in direct or indirect forms for routine living. So exemption in entry fee of museums and art galleries make them feel benefitted for paying tax. People know that anything they receive free from the government is an outcome of their paid taxes. Additionally, advertisement cost cut down due to more visitors because every visitor suggest the good place to visit without entry fees in their groups. In conclusion, although there can be some benefit of entrance fee, I feel that making entry free of cost in museums has more positive outcomes as the people of the locality will get to know about rich history and culture and they will get benefit for their paid taxes.
Artifacts and ancient texts, which
are showcased
in
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museums
reflect the rich
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history
behind our successful civilization.
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Some
individuals contemplate that they should be
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allowed
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entry
in
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museums
without any charges. I
strongly
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agree
that
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people
should be
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allowed
in
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museums
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free
of cost as it will generate more
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visitors
and
also
the taxpayer will feel
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benefitted
.

To
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begin
with, making
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entry
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free
in
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museums
will attract more
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visitors
to the place. Tourists will have exposure to our ancient
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culture and
they will become more aware about the
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history
of an
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old
era. If the
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entry
in
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museums
becomes
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free
, then it will become heaven for the students, who are
extremely
enthusiastic about
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history
and archeology.
For instance
/to exemplify/
for example
, there is a
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museum
in the
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small
town of
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Dharampur
in the state of Gujarat, where the
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entry
in the
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museum
is completely
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free
and it has been
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very
successful in attracting more
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visitors
who are quite enthusiastic about
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history
and culture.

Furthermore
, every citizen of the country pays taxes in direct or indirect forms for routine living.
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So
exemption in
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entry
fee of
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museums
and art galleries
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make
them feel
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benefitted
for paying tax.
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People
know that anything they receive
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free
from the
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government
is an outcome of their paid taxes.

Additionally
, advertisement cost
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cut
down due to more
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visitors
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because
every
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visitor
suggest the
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good
place to visit without
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entry
fees in their groups.

In conclusion
, although there can be
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some
benefit of entrance fee, I feel that making
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entry
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free
of cost in
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museums
has more
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positive
outcomes as the
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people
of the locality will
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get
to know about rich
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history
and
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culture and
they will
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get
benefit for their paid taxes.
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IELTS essay Art galleries and museums preserve important artifacts of history hence they have historical significance. Some people opine that entry to the museums should be free.

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