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Today more people are travelling than ever before why is this case what is the benefit of travelling for travellers

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Gone are the days when people used to spend all their lives in the same city and the tour was a word for rich people only. Now, with the technological advancements, cheaper flight, and ever increasing awareness towards other states and countries, the world has become a smaller place. Having travelled since childhood, I can definitely say that the tourism industry is changing fast and this is attracting a lot more travellers each year. This essay delves into the reasons behind increasing travellers and benefits of travelling. Firstly, people want to get refreshed quite often due to their increasing workload and they have easy access to information they want. These are the two main reasons people travel more frequently than ever before. It is evident that busier workdays and the hectic lifestyle can easily drain one out. People have started to work more and earn more as compared to earlier days. Also, with the wave of information that the internet has brought, everyone is better informed about the world outside their office or home. These things have acted as precursors to the increase in the number of people who opt travelling as a holiday get away. Second, tourism is taken very seriously in several countries now. Countries like Australia and France have travel & tourism as an important part of their economy. Tourism contributes to around 30% of the national GDP for Dubai. Thus, people have started picking up careers in the realm of tourism, as travel bloggers, trip organisers, etc. I myself have met people who travel for a living and love doing so. These factors have also led to accrual in the travelling population. I believe travelling exposes us to different people and their traditions, outside or even within a country. India itself is a collection of myriad customs, flavours and languages. Visiting places one has never been to and meeting people with different beliefs broadens our perspectives. Introduction to different cultures catalyses respect towards the mutual differences. It helps us understand people in a new light, which can be very helpful to alleviate tensions during political or cultural conflicts. In a nutshell, I would say that travelling is equivalent to education. It can bring people closer to each other despite their differences, which is very important in today’s global world.
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in the same city and the tour was a word for rich
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people
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, with the technological advancements, cheaper flight, and
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ever increasing
awareness towards other states and
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countries
, the world has become a smaller place. Having travelled since childhood, I can definitely say that the
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tourism
industry is changing
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fast
and this is attracting a lot more
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travellers
each year. This essay delves into the reasons behind increasing
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travellers
and benefits of travelling.

Firstly
,
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people
want to
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get
refreshed quite
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often
due to their increasing
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workload and
they have easy access to information they want. These are the two main reasons
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people
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travel
more
frequently
than ever
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before
. It is evident that busier workdays and the hectic lifestyle can
easily
drain one out.
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People
have
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started
to work more and earn more
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as
compared to earlier days.
Also
, with the wave of information that the internet has brought, everyone is better informed about the world outside their office or home. These things have acted as precursors to the increase in the number of
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people
who opt
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travelling
as a holiday
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get
away.

Second,
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tourism
is taken
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very
seriously
in several
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countries
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now
.
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Countries
like Australia and France have
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travel
&
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tourism
as an
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important
part of their economy.
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Tourism
contributes to around 30% of the national GDP for Dubai.
Thus
,
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people
have
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started
picking up careers in the realm of
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tourism
, as
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travel
bloggers, trip
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organisers
, etc. I myself have met
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people
who
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travel
for a living and
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love
doing
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so
. These factors have
also
led to accrual in the
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travelling
population.

I believe
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travelling
exposes us to
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different
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people
and their traditions, outside or even within a
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country
. India itself is a collection of myriad customs,
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flavours
and languages. Visiting places one has never been to and meeting
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people
with
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different
beliefs broadens our perspectives. Introduction to
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different
cultures catalyses respect towards the mutual differences. It
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helps
us understand
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people
in a new light, which can be
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very
helpful to alleviate tensions during political or cultural conflicts.

In a nutshell, I would say that
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travelling
is equivalent to education. It can bring
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people
closer to each other despite their differences, which is
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very
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important
in
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today
’s global world.
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IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before why is this case what is the benefit of travelling for travellers

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  American English
5 paragraphs
383 words
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