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Today more and more people are shopping online

Today more and more people are shopping online ArjPn
With advancement of technology online shopping has become a trend among people of all age groups. Many people are preferring to shop online than physical shopping BECAUSE OF AVAILABILITY OF VARIETY IN PRODUCTS AND EASY PAYMENT OPTIONS. But there are some negative points to it ALSO. THIS ESSAY WILL LOOK INTO BOTH THE SIDES OF ONLINE SHOPPING. ON POSITIVE SIDE, Although, there are several advantages like it offers vast variety of options to shop from as well as you can make payments through debit and credit cards and other payment options it doesnot require physical cash. Also you can shop from any where no matter where you are present, so you can shop from your office or home. EXAMPLE ON NEGATIVE SIDE, But as we all know everything comes with some disadvantages as well. It sometimes disappoints you with what arrive at your door. It differs from size or colour or something else which is different from what you have ordered. Also some websites offers you tempting discounts to fool you. EXAMPLE From all this we can conclude that shopping online can be useful many times but we should shop wisely and that it doesn't create a mess to ourselves later
With advancement of technology
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online
shopping has become a trend among
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people
of all age groups.
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Many
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people
The verb 'preferring' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are preferring
to
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shop
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online
than physical shopping
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BECAUSE
OF AVAILABILITY OF VARIETY IN PRODUCTS AND EASY PAYMENT OPTIONS.
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But
there are
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some
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negative
points to it
ALSO
. THIS ESSAY WILL LOOK INTO BOTH THE SIDES OF
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ONLINE
SHOPPING.

ON
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POSITIVE
SIDE, Although, there are several advantages like it offers vast variety of options to
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shop
from
as well
as you can
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make
payments through debit and credit cards and other payment options it
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doesnot
require physical cash.
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Also
you can
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shop
from
Did you mean "anywhere"?
any where
no matter where you are present,
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so
you can
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shop
from your office or home. EXAMPLE

ON
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NEGATIVE
SIDE,
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But
as we all know everything
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comes
with
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some
disadvantages
as well
. It
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sometimes
disappoints you with what arrive at your door. It differs from size or
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colour
or something else which is
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different
from what you have ordered.
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Also
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some
websites offers you tempting discounts to fool you. EXAMPLE

From all this we can conclude that shopping
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online
can be useful
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many
times
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but
we should
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shop
wisely
and that it doesn't create a mess to ourselves later
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IELTS essay Today more and more people are shopping online

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
200 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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