Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Today many people feel unsafe staying at home or going out. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this?

Today many people feel unsafe staying at home or going out. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this? Donm7
There is no doubt, nowadays the number of individuals, who do not feel safe no matter where they are, at home or outside, has escalated. From my point of view, improvements on crime rate and lack of police officers and cameras are key factors, however there are a number of solutions to solve it. To begin with, most individuals do not feel safe despite they are at home or outside. Because of developments in crime rate. To make it clear, most offenders frighten citizens by steeling their valuable items from their apartments or just outside. Besides that devellers scare of criminals, due to lack of well-experienced police force and cameras as well, since police officers cannot find lawbreakers, if there is a frame even in the downtown. To illustrate, most parents in European countries do not allow to their children to play outside, as according to researchers there are more than 30 crimes per week, that related to kidnapping. And only about 5 of them are found by police officers. There are few practical methods that governments can utilize to takle above mentioned issue. Firstly, authorities are recommended to divert more capital for training courses, that assist them to fortify the police force. In other words, new police officers have lack of enough experience and they do not know how to act in unexpected situations. Another solution is increase in the number of jamcams to make streets safer, meainly cutdown the rate of road accidents. Besides, installing more state-of-the-art cameras on public places as well as around every building, as it can give a hand to decrease violence. Because, if wrongdoers feel, that someone is monitoring them, they will definitely avoid their offences. In conclusion, developments on the rate of violence due to lack of police force and cameras, make devellers feel unsafity, however governments can avoid it by funding more on training police and installing cameras around the whole city.
There is no doubt, nowadays the number of individuals, who do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
safe no matter where they are, at home or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outside
, has escalated. From my point of view, improvements on crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lack
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
police
officers and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cameras
are key factors,
however
there are a number of solutions to solve it.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, most individuals do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
safe despite they are at home or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outside
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
of developments in crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
, most offenders frighten citizens by steeling their valuable items from their apartments or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outside
.
Besides
that
Possible spelling mistake found.
devellers
scare of criminals, due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lack
of well-experienced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
police
force and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cameras
as well
, since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
police
officers cannot find lawbreakers, if there is a frame even in the downtown. To illustrate, most parents in European countries do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
to their children to play
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outside
, as according to researchers there are more than 30 crimes per week, that related to kidnapping. And
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
about 5 of them
are found
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
police
officers.

There are few practical methods that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
can utilize to
Possible spelling mistake found.
takle
above mentioned issue.
Firstly
, authorities
are recommended
to divert more capital for training courses, that assist them to fortify the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
police
force.
In other words
, new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
police
officers have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lack
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
experience and
they do not know how to act in unexpected situations. Another solution is increase in the number of
Possible spelling mistake found.
jamcams
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
streets safer,
Possible spelling mistake found.
meainly
Possible spelling mistake found.
cutdown
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
of road accidents.
Besides
, installing more state-of-the-art
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cameras
on public places
as well
as around every building, as it can give a hand to decrease violence.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
, if wrongdoers
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
, that someone is monitoring them, they will definitely avoid their
Possible spelling mistake. 'offences' is British English.
offences
.

In conclusion
, developments on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rate
of violence due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lack
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
police
force and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cameras
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
Possible spelling mistake found.
devellers
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feel
Possible spelling mistake found.
unsafity
,
however
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
can avoid it by funding more on training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
police
and installing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cameras
around the whole city.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Today many people feel unsafe staying at home or going out. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts