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In recent times, most teenagers do shopping for relaxation purposes. Besides this, I have a negative perspective about this view. They must also do other activities rather than shopping. Both of the points will discuss further in the essay. Young people do shopping as a pastime activity because it is a trend among youth. Adolescents go to shopping centers and mega malls for chilling purposes. They usually go there to reduce the burden of day-to-day life and do extra activities such as watching movies, playing games in the mall, and waste a huge amount of pocket money. For instance, in Indian adults go to shopping centers and buy luxurious clothes, perfumes, and other branded accessories. Secondly, they should spend their leisure time allocated for other activities. For example, teens should go to the gym, sports complex, and library to develop new skills which will help them for their bright future. In addition, these activities can help to improve their body fitness level but also their mental health. When they read some books from the library so, they will gain knowledge from it. Indirectly it is connected with our nation's economy because youth is the backbone of the country's economy. In conclusion, I believe that youngsters do other activities such as exercise, reading rather than shopping. The main reason is shopping is waste of time and money. If they follow other useful activities, so they will become a good person in society also it will help to build the developed country.
In recent times, most
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teenagers
do
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shopping
for relaxation purposes.
Besides
this, I have a
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negative
perspective about this view. They
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must
also
do
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other
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activities
rather
than
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shopping
. Both of the points will discuss
further
in the essay.

Young
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people
do
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shopping
as a pastime
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activity
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because
it is a trend among youth. Adolescents go to
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shopping
centers and mega malls for chilling purposes. They
usually
go there to
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reduce
the burden of day-to-day life and do extra
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
such as watching movies, playing games in the mall, and waste a huge amount of pocket money.
For instance
, in Indian adults go to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
centers and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
luxurious clothes, perfumes, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
branded accessories.

Secondly
, they should spend their leisure time allocated for
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other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
.
For example
, teens should go to the gym, sports complex, and library to develop new
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skills
which will
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help
them for their bright future.
In addition
, these
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activities
can
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help
to
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improve
their body fitness level
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but
also
their mental health. When they read
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some
books from the library
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so
, they will gain knowledge from it.
Indirectly
it
is connected
with our nation's economy
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because
youth is the backbone of the country's economy.

In conclusion
, I believe that youngsters do
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other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
such as exercise, reading
rather
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
. The main reason is
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shopping
is waste of time and money. If they follow
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other
useful
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activities
,
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so
they will become a
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good
person in society
also
it will
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help
to build the
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developed country
.
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IELTS essay Vaiwbwis sieves w wow sis

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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