Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Today many countries give the important to healthcare and education system

Today many countries give the important to healthcare and education system LbaV3
The citizens must pay a lot of money in taxes, but education and healthcare are free in some countries. Firstly, The fact that citizens when they go to work are paid wages and withheld taxes are filed for social security purposes. Paying taxes is a right and an obligation of all citizens because taxes are a great source of revenue for the state budget to ensure social welfare for the people. At that time, our children will be able to study for free until high school, health is guaranteed with insurance from 60% to 100% depending on the taxpayer. Paying a lot of taxes while we are still of working age is also a true form of savings to ensure when they are unemployed and then the taxes we have paid will be compensated for our benefits. when we are old and our children come back to school without financial burden if we are unemployed or have unexpected risks to our health. Nevertheless, paying high taxes in some countries still does not have good social security. Public hospitals for citizens who participate in social insurance and pay taxes are not as good as private hospitals. For instance, when everything is free, you don't get priority service, the drugs used are not on the list of covered drugs, and sometimes in my country even though you pay taxes and have insurance but when In the hospital, we also have to pay a large difference in fees for categories that are not on the sponsored list. State-funded schools will not guarantee the modern teaching process with access to new technologies. Students in a private school in my country are studying in an international environment at an expensive cost, but not in a public school. Students at a public school only study according to the curriculum of the government ministry of education of that country. Therefore, there are a small number of citizens in some countries who are still not satisfied with society in terms of study and health, even though the tax they pay to the government is not low. In short, it depends on the policy of each country to make the citizens of that country feel happy with what the government has to offer and will be willing to pay high taxes because the benefits provided are well worth what the citizens have spent.
The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
money in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
education and healthcare are free in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
.
Firstly
, The fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
when they go to work
are paid
wages and withheld
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
are filed
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
security purposes. Paying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
is a right and an obligation of all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
are a great source of revenue for the state budget to ensure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
welfare for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. At that time, our children will be able to study for free until high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
, health
is guaranteed
with insurance from 60% to 100% depending on the taxpayer.

Paying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
while we are
still
of working age is
also
a true form of savings to ensure when they
are unemployed
and then the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
we have paid will
be compensated
for our benefits.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
when
we are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
and our children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
without financial burden if we
are unemployed
or have unexpected
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
to our health.

Nevertheless
, paying high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
still
does not have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
security. Public hospitals for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
who participate in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
insurance and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
are not as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
as private hospitals.
For instance
, when everything is free, you don't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
priority service, the drugs
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
are not on the list of covered drugs, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
even though
you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
and have insurance
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
when In the hospital, we
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
a large difference in fees for categories that are not on the sponsored list. State-funded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
will not guarantee the modern teaching process with access to new technologies. Students in a private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
are studying in an international environment at an expensive cost,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not in a public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. Students at a public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
study according to the curriculum of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
ministry of education of that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
.
Therefore
, there are a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
who are
still
not satisfied with society in terms of study and health,
even though
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is not low.

In short, it depends on the policy of each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
of that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
feel happy with what the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
offer and will be willing to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the benefits provided are well worth what the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
have spent.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Today many countries give the important to healthcare and education system

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Today many countries give the important to healthcare and education system