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some people belive that we save all wild animals , while some belives we save some animals .

some people belive that we save all wild animals, while some belives we save some animals. x8NA6
There are numerous people believe that It is very essential to protect all the jungle animals whereas rest of the masses said to save the some animals not all. Well in below paragraph we discuss strong practical reason behind this in last i give my opinion. On the one hand, few of the individuals opinion that we save all the wild animals. To explain it, there are every animal have their own importance and in which if one animal is not in jungle the forest is like dull. For example if peacocks are lost in forests then the beauty of the forest is not remained same. On the other hand, rest of the masses believed that we save not all creatures we save only the some important and essential creatures. To explicate it, well there are two reason behind this first is the most of the pupils are afraid from the wild animals. because wild animals are too dangerous from the any of the pet. they attack any on the people. as people watched in many videos how most of the individuals death reason is immediate attack by the forest animals like lion, tiger etc. For example A survey conducted by the Indian law makers he found that 70 percent of the population are stand in the way of we save only some of the creature. In my opinion, All the creature and animal have their own identity and their own importance so I think we save all creatures. rather than the some of the important animals. In conclusion, we save all the forest animals due to fact the every human has their identity and same like every creature has their own identity. we save all the creatures.
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essential to protect all the jungle
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the
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some
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not all. Well in below paragraph we discuss strong practical reason behind this in last
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give my opinion.

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opinion that we
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all the wild
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it, there are every
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have their
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importance and in which
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if
one
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is not in jungle the
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is like dull.
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if peacocks
are lost
in
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forests
then the beauty of the
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forest
is not remained same.

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, rest of the masses believed that we
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not all
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creatures
we
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some
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and essential
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creatures
. To explicate it, well there are two reason behind this
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is the most of the pupils are
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.
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are too
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videos how most of the
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death reason is immediate attack by the
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like lion, tiger etc.
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some of the
creature.

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and
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have their
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identity and their
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some of the
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In conclusion
, we
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all the
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forest
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due to fact the every human has their identity and same like every
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has their
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identity.
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IELTS essay some people belive that we save all wild animals, while some belives we save some animals.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
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