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Today, it is common to see famous sports people advertising sports products. What are the positives and negatives of this rule?

Today, it is common to see famous sports people advertising sports products. What are the positives and negatives of this rule? ONQ7
It is increasingly common for prominent sports people to advertise sports products. This essay will highlight some of the benefits and drawbacks that I have resulted such an approach. Looking firstly at the advantages, they give a chance to people to opt more quality items. Nowadays, it is noticeable that there are lots of companies which produce sports products and generally, it is challenging to elect the optimal thing for us. Sportsmen have information which brand is better and utilize the best one. As a consequence, when they illustrate the item they use and recommend their quality and usefulness, for instance, it will be more easier for people to elect the right one, and people will make sure about its feature and so on. Furthermore, except from its positives, some negative aspects exist like sometimes the product may not be as it was said. Advertising is increasing day by day and many companies accompany with famous sportsmen to advertise their products and pay them a great deal of money in exchange for this. Consequently, a number of them agree to to this due to money even if they do not use their produce in the least. Once and for all, when people who are big fan of them see the ads will be willing to purchase them without any data about item. In conclusion, as it can be seen, despite the benefits of this kind of advertising there are severel of drawbacks as well and we should not trust sportsman owing to the fact they can act because of money.
It is
increasingly
common for prominent sports
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people
to advertise sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
. This essay will highlight
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some of the
benefits and drawbacks that I have resulted such an approach.

Looking
firstly
at the advantages, they give a chance to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to opt more quality items. Nowadays, it is noticeable that there are lots of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
which produce sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
and
generally
, it is challenging to elect the optimal thing for us. Sportsmen have information which brand is better and utilize the best one. As a consequence, when they illustrate the item they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
and recommend their quality and usefulness,
for instance
, it will be
Use only "easier" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more easier
for
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people
to elect the right one, and
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people
will
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make
sure about its feature and
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so
on.

Furthermore
, except from its positives,
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some
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negative
aspects exist like
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
the
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product
may not be as it
was said
. Advertising is increasing day by day and
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
The usual collocation for "accompany" is "by," not "with." It is better to say this: "accompany by".
accompany with
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famous
sportsmen to advertise their
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products
and pay them a great deal of money in exchange for this.
Consequently
, a number of them
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agree
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to to
this due to money even if they do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their produce in the least. Once and for all, when
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people
who are
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big
fan of them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the ads will be willing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
them without any data about item.

In conclusion
, as it can be
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seen
, despite the benefits of this kind of advertising there are
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severel
of drawbacks as
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
well and
we should not trust sportsman owing to the fact they can act
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of money.

IELTS essay Today, it is common to see famous sports people advertising sports products. What are the positives and negatives of this rule?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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