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Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?

Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. What is your opinion? VWnJ
Every year, thousands of people worldwide die from both smoking tobacco and involuntarily breathing it in. Despite this, I do not agree that it should be made illegal. However, I also believe that there should be a regulation on its use, considering its harms to health. In the following paragraphs, I shall put forth my arguments to support my views. It is irrefutable that tobacco products, especially cigarettes, could cause lung cancer, heart disease, and other illnesses. Drug abuse also has many potentially harmful effects not only on individuals but also on family, friends, work and society. Frequent drug users may turn to crime to meet the increasing expense for their habit. Continued drug use may cause personality changes. Some users lose interest in school or work, or have difficulty meeting the responsibilities of a job or family. Nonetheless, it costs society far more to prohibit a drug than it does to regulate it. And I‘m not talking about just money. Prohibition creates organized crime, and with it you get street wars, and police corruption. With more violence comes more police, and that means more cost. Regulation on the other hand, works quite well. The government should decide who gets to make it, who sells it, and who it is sold to. There should be controls on tobacco regarding potency, packaging, advertising, and a lot of other things. This is definitely better than banning a drug which leads to organized crime. Moreover, tobacco has long been a source of money for the governments in many countries. This income comes from taxes on the manufactured products. Excise taxes also come from tobacco that arrives from other countries. Finally, I believe that it is better to educate people about the harms of tobacco. This approach has worked better in many countries and there has been a reduction in the sale of tobacco products To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, banning tobacco is not a good idea. Drug prohibition has been the most failed social policy and banning tobacco is a step backwards. However, there should be control on the manufacturing and sale of tobacco.
Every year, thousands of
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people
worldwide
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die
from both smoking
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tobacco
and

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involuntarily
breathing it in. Despite this, I do not
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agree
that it should
be made
illegal.

However
, I
also
believe that there should be a regulation on its
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use
, considering its

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harms
to health. In the following paragraphs, I shall put forth my arguments
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to


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support
my views.

It is irrefutable that
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tobacco
products,
especially
cigarettes, could cause lung cancer,

heart disease, and
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other
illnesses.
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Drug
abuse
also
has
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many
potentially
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harmful


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effects
not
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only
on individuals
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but
also
on family, friends, work and society. Frequent

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drug
users may turn to crime to
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meet
the increasing expense for their habit.

Continued
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drug
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use
may cause personality
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changes
.
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Some
users lose interest
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in


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school
or work, or have difficulty meeting the responsibilities of a job or family.

Nonetheless, it costs society far more to prohibit a
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drug
than it does to regulate it.

And I‘m not talking about
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just
money. Prohibition creates organized crime, and with
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it


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you
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get
street wars, and police corruption. With more violence
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comes
more police,

and that means more cost. Regulation on the
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other
hand, works quite well. The

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government
should decide who
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gets
to
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make
it, who sells it, and who it
is sold
to.

There should be controls on
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tobacco
regarding potency, packaging, advertising, and

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a
lot of
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other
things. This is definitely better than banning a
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drug
which leads
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to


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organized
crime.

Moreover
,
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tobacco
has long been a source of money for the
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governments
in
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many


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countries
. This income
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comes
from taxes on the manufactured products. Excise

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taxes
also
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come
from
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tobacco
that arrives from
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other
countries.
Finally
, I believe that

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it
is better to educate
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people
about the harms of
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tobacco
. This approach has
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worked


better in
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many
countries and there has been a reduction in the sale of tobacco

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products


To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, banning
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tobacco
is not a
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good
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idea
.

Drug prohibition has been the most failed social policy and banning
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tobacco
is a step

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backwards
.
However
, there should be control on the manufacturing and sale of

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tobacco
.
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IELTS essay Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. What is your opinion?

Essay
  American English
28 paragraphs
357 words
5.5
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