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People try new dangerous sports such as sky diving or rock climbing. Should such sports be banned ?

People try new dangerous sports such as sky diving or rock climbing. Should such sports be banned? LQ5r
Definition of sport is changed nowadays by people as they fond of extreme risky sport activities in sky and mountains. I never deninded if such sports can perform with safety measurement and expert guidance by their on risk and courage to it. Era has been changed since last decand for express of interest by people from indoor games to dangerous sports. Younger preferred activities like sky diving, paraglyding, mountain climbing and water sports, they want to challenge themeself and feel thrill behind such threatful task. Joy of such activity can be enhanced by minimizing risk factor of it by taking guidance or coaching furthermore maintain safety precorson under instruction by expertise likewise people can performed taks on own self-confidence. On flipside, we cannot dined our research data sawn death rate of human in such life thetaring task, even with that ration was higher of youngster in comparison of other age people. A government can look into it and provide guidelines to reduce accidents and they can banned it for few time interval if there is any weather issues. To put it in a nut shell, people can try all extremely scary and threatful sport activities with their own confidence and fully safety measurement with observation of trainer without fail to following government guidelines, however it can be stop down in emergency condition of weather.
Definition of
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people
as they fond of extreme risky
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sport
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activities
in sky and mountains. I never
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deninded
if such
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sports
can perform with safety measurement and expert guidance by their on
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and courage to it.

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since last
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for express of
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interest by
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people
from indoor games to
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dangerous
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sports
. Younger preferred
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activities
like
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sky diving
,
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paraglyding
, mountain climbing and water
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sports
, they want to challenge
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themeself
and feel thrill behind such
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threatful
task. Joy of such
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activity
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risk
factor of it by taking guidance or coaching
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maintain safety
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precorson
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people
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own
self-confidence.

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government
can look into it and provide guidelines to
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reduce
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accidents and
they can
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banned
it for few time interval if there is any weather issues.

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people
can try all
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threatful
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sport
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activities
with their
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own
confidence and
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safety measurement with observation of trainer without fail to following
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government
guidelines,
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stop
down in emergency condition of weather.
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IELTS essay People try new dangerous sports such as sky diving or rock climbing. Should such sports be banned?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
224 words
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