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To: Restaurant manager From: Sirojeva Zebiniso Subject : Menu preference for healthy food eater

To: Restaurant manager From: Sirojeva Zebiniso Subject: Menu preference for healthy food eater PVRoK
The purpose of this report is to assess stellar menu for not only fussy eaters, but also all types of eaters who pretty tuck into healthy food. Undoubtedly your prestigious restaurant has mouthwatering and delicious dishes, but I have some suggestions for some reasons. The main reason is that a friend of mine and me are planning to have lunch together at your restaurant. Having said that he eats a balanced diet all the time by this I mean he is always trying to be careful about the food when we congregate in a cafe or restaurant. By learning the menu I have some suggestions for you. Firstly it'll be great if you add some new salads except mixed one. Because when many choices to eat, it makes sense that eaters can be so pleased to face a wide range of choices. Additionally main course is perfect while desserts have some problems I assume. If I have to say my suggestions about desserts one I strongly advise you to drop out baked apple. Instead of it chocolate cake will make happy all eaters. Also the most important thing is that be careful about "fruit season" because my friend has an allergy to bananas. Personally, I really appreciate the staff of your workplace in other words, they are so amicable and always put on tidy clothes In conclusion, we are somehow content with the menu.
The purpose of this report is to assess stellar menu for not
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fussy eaters,
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all types of eaters who pretty tuck into healthy food.
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your prestigious restaurant has mouthwatering and delicious dishes,
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but
I have
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some
suggestions for
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reasons.

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cafe
or restaurant. By learning the menu I have
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some
suggestions for you.
Firstly
it'll be great if you
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add
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some
new salads except mixed one.
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when
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many
choices to eat, it
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sense that eaters can be
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pleased
to face a wide range of choices.
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Additionally
main course is perfect while desserts have
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some
problems I assume.
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I
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have to
say my suggestions about desserts one I
strongly
advise you to drop out baked apple.
Instead
of it chocolate cake will
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make
happy all eaters.
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Also
the most
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thing is that be careful about
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fruit season
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because
my friend has an allergy to bananas.
Personally
, I
really
appreciate the staff of your workplace
in other words
, they are
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so
amicable and always put on tidy clothes

In conclusion
, we are somehow content with the menu.
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IELTS essay To: Restaurant manager From: Sirojeva Zebiniso Subject: Menu preference for healthy food eater

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
234 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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