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News editors decide what to broadcast on TV and what to print in newspapers. Some people feel that news broadcasts focus too heavily on bad news and should include lighter stories while others believe that the news should remain focused on important event v.2

News editors decide what to broadcast on TV and what to print in newspapers. Some people feel that news broadcasts focus too heavily on bad news and should include lighter stories while others believe that the news should remain focused on important event v. 2
The contents on newspapers and TV news are controlled and managed by news editors. TV and newspapers are important resources, which main purpose is providing information to the public. Whether the contents of news are negative or positive is dependent upon listeners. When it comes to the news, I personally think that, news should focus on telling people what is happening with the world regardless with its impact. The main purpose of news is broadcasting any events to the public despite to its divergent consequences. People acquire information which is derived from the news and hence the content of news cannot be changed dependent upon audience’s taste. Furthermore, the story of news can be unpleasant according to the situation of the public. The public would react differently with the same story in the case of serial criminals as an example; the fact that they live next door would react different than the story of live some other countries. Not all news broadcast bad news as often we can hear the discovery of new treatment for the cancer or the major organization donates a large lump sum to the charity. Therefore, the news should not be biased on its contents. In fact, some other people would claim that the lighter news is better for the community, because the story is less depressing, which encourage the public to less confront to the government. Everyday light news on a media program would influence heavily on people’s emotions in a positive way. People could feel happier with their lives and see things more optimistic ways. Therefore, other people would believe that the current media should include light news but this is definitely not what I prefer. Personally I believe that lighter news would bring false hope to citizens to be impractical and illogical. The lighter news could make some impact to the people’s emotions but I believe that this is the short term effects. In the long term, this effect is minimal and they feel miserable for their rat-race lifestyles. In conclusion, despite to the news editor is responsible for the contents of the news; it is the initial resource for all the information that public would receive. It could be tempting to broadcast only sweetness to the public however; the reality does not always contain the sweets. Some materials would be displeasing to bear but, the reality is not sweet.
The contents on newspapers and TV
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are controlled
and managed by
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editors. TV and newspapers are
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important
resources, which main purpose is providing information to the
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public
. Whether the contents of
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news
are
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negative
or
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positive
is dependent upon listeners. When it
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comes
to the
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news
, I
personally
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think
that,
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news
should focus on telling
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people
what is happening with the world regardless with its impact.

The main purpose of
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news
is broadcasting any
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events
to the
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public
despite to its divergent consequences.
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People
acquire information which
is derived
from the
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news
and
hence
the
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content
of
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news
cannot be
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changed
dependent upon audience’s taste.
Furthermore
, the
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story
of
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news
can be unpleasant according to the situation of the
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public
. The
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public
would react
differently
with the same
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story
in the case of serial criminals as an example; the fact that they
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live
next
door would react
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different
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than
the
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story
of
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live
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some
other countries. Not all
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news
broadcast
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bad
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news
as
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often
we can hear the discovery of
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new
treatment for the cancer or the major organization donates a large lump sum to the charity.
Therefore
, the
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news
should not
be biased
on its contents.

In fact,
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some
other
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people
would claim that the lighter
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news
is better for the community,
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because
the
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story
is less depressing, which encourage the
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public
to less confront to the
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government
. Everyday light
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news
on a media program would influence
heavily
on
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people’s
emotions in a
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positive
way.
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People
could feel happier with their
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lives
and
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see
things more optimistic ways.
Therefore
, other
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people
would believe that the
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current
media should include light
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news
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but
this is definitely not what I prefer.
Personally
I believe that lighter
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news
would bring false hope to citizens to be impractical and illogical. The lighter
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news
could
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make
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some
impact to the
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people’s
emotions
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but
I believe that this is the short term effects. In the long term, this effect is
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minimal and
they feel miserable for their rat-race lifestyles.

In conclusion
, despite to the
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news
editor is responsible for the contents of the
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news
; it is the initial resource for all the information that
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public
would receive. It could be tempting to broadcast
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only
sweetness to the
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public
however
; the reality does not always contain the sweets.
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Some
materials would be displeasing to bear
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but
, the reality is not sweet.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay News editors decide what to broadcast on TV and what to print in newspapers. Some people feel that news broadcasts focus too heavily on bad news and should include lighter stories while others believe that the news should remain focused on important event v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
397 words
5.5
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