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Throughout history, male leaders always lead us to violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders, it will be more peaceful. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Throughout history, male leaders always lead us to violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders, it will be more peaceful. with this opinion? LNrK
Most of the countries in the world are led by men, only a few countries are governed by women. I personally think that whether a government or a leadership brings violence or peace has nothing to do with the gender of the leader. It is generally believed that women have gentler personality than men in the way they act. But, it does not guarantee that if a woman leads a country or a society, they can prevent conflicts, clash or violence from happening because a leader is not the only party causing or triggering conflicts. In running her government and taking a decision or a policy, a female leader cooperates with and discusses a lot with many other parties so I do not think that her mother figure will come first in dealing with various complicated problems her government is facing. Instead, she can not give priority to her feminine feeling (caring, loving, affecting, etc) in policy making. A leader, either female or male, needs to take action in accordance with the situation. That is why I believe that the gender of a leader makes no difference in this issue. Many countries like Bangladesh, India, and Pakistan were governed by female leaders and yet the conflict and violence increased during their time and this is a clear indication that a female leader cannot guarantee and peaceful society.
Most of the
countries
in the world
are led
by
men
,
only
a few
countries
are governed
by women. I
personally
think
that whether a
government
or a leadership brings violence or peace has nothing to do with the gender of the leader.

It is
generally
believed that women have gentler personality than
men
in the way they act.
But
, it does not guarantee that if a woman leads a
country
or a society, they can
prevent
conflicts, clash or violence from happening
because
a
leader
is not the
only
party causing or triggering conflicts. In running her
government
and taking a decision or a policy, a
female
leader
cooperates with and discusses a lot with
many
other parties
so
I do not
think
that her mother figure will
come
first
in dealing with various complicated problems her
government
is facing.
Instead
, she can not give priority to her feminine feeling (caring, loving, affecting, etc) in policy making. A
leader
, either
female
or male, needs to take action in accordance with the situation.
That is
why I believe that the gender of a
leader
makes
no difference in this issue.
Many
countries
like Bangladesh, India, and Pakistan
were governed
by
female
leaders
and
yet
the conflict and violence increased during their time and this is a
clear
indication that a
female
leader
cannot guarantee and peaceful society.
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IELTS essay Throughout history, male leaders always lead us to violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders, it will be more peaceful. with this opinion?

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