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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. K2n3
Artists require the freedom of expression to some extent to develop innovative ideas. Some people argue that full freedom to express any opinion or ideas need to be given to artists. In my opinion, artists should be given enough freedom to express their ideas but total freedom is not required. Artists should have the liberty to express their views and original ideas without having to worry about the consequences. When they have the freedom to express, more and more people will turn to arts and this will enrich our culture and civilisation. Moreover, many artists highlight several social issues and they spread awareness among the masses. Many of them stand for social justice. After a rape case of an 8 year old girl in India, many people expressed their anger and emotions through songs and these songs became viral on social media. Thus it aroused feelings of many people and the authorities were forced to take immediate action against the criminals. However, the art works should not have any destructive impact on the society. There have been several incidences where artworks like paintings created tension and violence. For example M F Hussain’s paintings of nude Indian Goddesses created chaos among Hindu people. In addition to this, objectifying women in various art works may negatively influence children and teenagers. They may see women as mere objects of lust and fail to respect them. In other words, creating negative emotions through art increases the crime and violence in the society and can lead to many problems. To conclude, some amount of freedom is necessary for artists to thrive; however, total freedom can be a bad thing because it will encourage at least some artists to create artworks that have a negative impact on the society.
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Artists should have the liberty to
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express
their views and original
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ideas
without having to worry about the consequences. When they have the
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freedom
to
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express
, more and more
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people
will turn to
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arts
and this will enrich our culture and
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civilisation
.
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,
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many
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artists
highlight several social
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issues and
they spread awareness among the masses.
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of them stand for social justice. After a rape case of an 8 year
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old
girl in India,
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many
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people
expressed their anger and emotions through songs and these songs became viral on social media.
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Thus
it aroused feelings of
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many
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people
and the authorities
were forced
to take immediate action against the criminals.
However
, the
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art
works should not have any destructive impact on the society. There have been several incidences where artworks like paintings created tension and violence.
For example
M F Hussain’s paintings of nude Indian Goddesses created chaos among Hindu
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people
.
In addition
to this, objectifying women in various
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art
works may
negatively
influence children and
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teenagers
. They may
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see
women as mere objects of lust and fail to respect them.
In other words
, creating
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negative
emotions through
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art
increases the crime and violence in the society and can lead to
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many
problems.

To conclude
,
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some
amount of
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freedom
is necessary for
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artists
to thrive;
however
, total
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freedom
can be a
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thing
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because
it will encourage at least
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some
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artists
to create artworks that have a
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negative
impact on the society.
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IELTS essay Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
293 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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