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This is a picture of Messi when he scored his first goal for the club at the age of 17.

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This is a picture of Messi when he scored his first goal for the club at the age of 17. At this moment, he changed the way other people look at him. They couldn’t believe what this little boy can do afterwards. The militants slipped away and later regrouped. Nato allies had joined the US and a new Afghan government took over in 2004 but deadly Taliban attacks continued. President Barack Obama's "troop surge" in 2009 helped push back the Taliban but it was not long term. In 2014, at the end of what was the bloodiest year since 2001, Nato's international forces ended their combat mission, leaving responsibility for security to the Afghan army. That gave the Taliban momentum and they seized more territory. Peace talks between the US and the Taliban started tentatively, with the Afghan government pretty much uninvolved, and the agreement on a withdrawal came in February 2020 in Qatar. The US-Taliban deal did not stop the Taliban attacks - they switched their focus instead to Afghan security forces and civilians, and targeted assassinations. Their areas of control grew.
This is a picture of Messi when he scored his
first
goal for the club at the age of 17. At this moment, he
changed
the way other
people
look at him. They couldn’t believe what this
little
boy can do afterwards. The militants slipped away and later regrouped.

Nato
allies had
joined
the US and a new Afghan
government
took over in 2004
but
deadly Taliban attacks continued. President Barack Obama's
"
troop surge
"
in 2009
helped
push back the Taliban
but
it was not long term.

In 2014, at the
end
of what was the bloodiest year since 2001,
Nato
's international forces ended their combat mission, leaving responsibility for security to the Afghan army.

That gave the Taliban momentum and they seized more territory.

Peace talks between the US and the Taliban
started
tentatively
, with the Afghan
government
pretty much uninvolved, and the agreement on a withdrawal came in February 2020 in Qatar.

The US-Taliban deal did not
stop
the Taliban attacks
-
they switched their focus
instead
to Afghan security forces and civilians, and targeted assassinations. Their areas of control grew.
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IELTS essay This is a picture of Messi when he scored his first goal for the club at the age of 17.

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